Black Poetry : Emotional Breakdown

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  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feel my disgruntleness
    MAN, unhappy with myself
    Confused days
    Cluttered nights
    Only thoughts
    as my rest!
    I cry out for the world to listen
    When this crowded place is filled with only me
    I turn to the person next to me
    And my problems are all I see!
    Im trapped, barricaded , shackled
    To myself
    Im poor, in poverty
    Ive stolen my own wealth
    Help me, Help me
    Can I be someone else
    This is misery when trap
    Inside oneself
    Disorientated
    Fueled by hatred
    Mind about to explode
    I cant take it
    Tension, Stress
    A feel to kill
    Pitty, Sorrow
    Hard Life as my meal
    Tired, battered
    Bruised and Beaten
    Emotional break down
    Mind concedeing.

    Lj Unfin.
     
  2. naujae

    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Baby you got me all teary eyes but if you need me to take you out of that depression call me you got my number :slobber:
     
  3. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very well written, well done. :congrats:
     
  4. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Story of my life
    So true.
    So much pain we feel....pain caused and bundled by ourselves.


    Nice****
    Monad.poetress
     
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    ...this piece spirals with discontent
    and a whirlwind of emotions
    the tone of this poem
    reminds me of that place
    we often exist when change
    is in motion...
    we can't go back...
    yet sometimes we're not
    ready or afraid to move forward...


    Feeling this...
    Sage
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feeling that you are your own worse enemy, yet feeling helpless despite yourself. Very emotive, I could feel this poet.
     
  7. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnks fam appreciate the read & responses!! :luvu:
     
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    u write wit so much heart felt emotion
    got me feeling like i am walking ur path
    love the drop
    keep the voice coming
     
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    Aww, baby, I been to this place before. My heart goes out to you, and I'm puttin you in my prayers. You've got such a poetic gift, hang in there.
     
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    ya know brotha THEONE when you write pain its so eminent hearts heart just at the SOUND of your poetic presence...because it all becomes so clear.
    as painful as things can get
    i cant help but think that they are needed
    it puts the good stuff into perspective
    makes it all worth it
    you have been to the end now you can finally reach the new beginning
    may you find your peace my brotha :grouphug:
     
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