Black Poetry : Emotional Assasination

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  1. Aminata

    Aminata Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Emotionally assasinated
    ambushed by contaminated words that
    shot and left a hole in my life source
    I
    Have
    No
    Pulse I...

    failed at resusucitation
    how could you
    rescue I

    ran 5k race
    was...
    up for the chase but
    now
    opportunity has passed-
    too late

    your obligated to face
    your own mental displace

    worldly view of you...
    a disgrace

    I...

    Inhaled You
    internalized toxic words
    taxing my entire Being
    8% ain't ****

    ~exhaling~
    ~purging~
    ~smoking~
    out syllables of your
    love soliloquy
    like...gun smooke it burns I
    burn frank I

    cry tears internal to
    ease the pain
    calling on spiritual diety Isis to
    ~breathe~life
    that I may
    resurrect
    Live
    and
    Love...again

    (c)Essence of Aminata 2002
     
  2. N2urSoul

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    Sustah A -

    This is full of substance.......the title is very catching!

    Good to read you again...

    N2
     
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    Aminata...

    times like these are full of sadness and pain...and you have to remember is it not your fault...although the climb back up to the light is long and hard and slow, it is worth it....you are worth it...

    K
     
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    Nice poem, nice title.
     
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    afri...is that you?!?! or if not you just happen to have her name

    just the same I diggz this (but lemme know)

    1:heart:
     
  6. PoeticAlize

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    very nice. deep.
     
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    :wave: AfriDancr ~ Aminata ~ Sweetie Pie :wave:

    Good to read you again ... Welcome Home

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  8. Legendof_1_Spirit

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    <appears suddenly>

    Very stylish and well written. I love the transitions that U employed in this piece - the repetition of I- is very engaging. Each one drawing the reader in deeper and deeper. While at the same time heightening the feeling and emotional tone.

    Excellent work!

    <disappears>
     
  9. Aminata

    Aminata Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Fam!

    Thanks for comforting during this painful journey of love...GOD...I can't breathe...everytime I talk about it
    think about it
    write about it my...
    breathing passages become blocked
    and I choke on his words

    words that don't match actions:cry:

    TWOFISH...yes gurl it's me. How u b?

    DESTEE...It's good to be back home! Now can I get a hug or sumfin???

    :heart:
     
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    awwwwwwwwww Chile ... 'sho ya can ... :grouphug: :grouphug: :love:

    :kiss:
     
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