Black Poetry : eleven o'clock lover

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  1. flojo

    flojo Active Member MEMBER

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    Smooth and brown;
    eyes like coal
    My body he inhabited;
    my soul he stole
    My eleven oclock lover
    handsome and tall
    meet me in the park
    as darkness falls
    I'll kiss you all over;
    and I'll call you my own
    my eleven oclock lover
    'til it's time to go home.
    Now he's gone,
    moved away-
    Eleven o'clock turns to midnight-
    and soon another day
    My lonesome mind
    entertains the thought of no other;
    forever awaiting
    my eleven o'clock lover
     
  2. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh wow......... this was really nice....a nice thought...understood anticipation :wink:
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh this was bittersweet, great memories, but such loneliness. Expressively posed.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very lovely and well done too
     
  5. Akilah

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    I really felt the heat :hot:
    of excitement .... anticipation
    And the disapointment ...
    bewilderment :cry: of loss
    Thank you for sharing this piece


    Much Peace,
    Akilah :spinstar:
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is sooooo tight. Wow. May peace be yours, flojo.
     
  7. Bluewater

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    very nice poem
    wonderful
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh wow...
    love the urgency of passion
    in your work...
    Great flow!
     
  9. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a lovely piece!!

    greets
    moham
     
  10. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice, very nice, this was a deep and passionate flow, i liked it...
    much love,
    -story
     
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