Quiet Poetry Lounge : Elephant Man

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Heartbeat, Oct 31, 2002.

  1. Heartbeat

    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He's cashed in all his chips
    Said all he needed to say
    To all he needed to say it to
    Cleared his mind
    Cleared his heart
    Told the truth
    The whole truth
    Left no issue unresolved
    For the first time
    In a long time
    He slept like a babe
    So in need of rest
    The next day he began his walk
    All alone
    Inside himself
    Where everything is familiar
    Where he is understood
    No one will ever come in again
    He will never leave
    Committed to stay fit
    Strong for his last winter
    And winters to come
    He'll walk alone
    Like the great elephant
    On his way to the sacred burial ground
    There to await his end

    BE
    fini
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    BE....u scribe dis to the T.......
     
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    ShadeeLadee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is very sad... too sad for words at this time. going to read it again.

    Shade
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ShadeeLadee .... one who reads as well as you will find the bizarre peace found by the Elephant Man.

    BE
     
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    Yes, truth is cleansing and rest is good for the soul. But remember that if there is breath there is life and hope and not even elephants live alone. Their burial ground is for death, not a place for a living breathing man. The elephants might even take offense at such a vibrant being in their midst, even for one who is weary for a time. So just rest friend, and know that in time, life will begin again.
     
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    This is a poignant piece, BE. ...a bit maudlin (unlike your usual writes)...and sad. But trouble doesn't last always...and even the elephant man knows he doesn't belong in the graveyard with death and decay.

    Thank you for the read.

    a
     
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    this still calls in depth
     
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    Sounds like the elephant has made peace with his life, for all that it has, and has not been, and is walking toward death. But perhaps it's not death's time yet. The utter sadness of this read, just slowly creeps upon you...whew.
     
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    truth will set you free and create a complete sense of serenity. excellent scribe of acceptance of the inevitable
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To Know yourself and Your Destiny is Stength.
    A LIFE of hardship
    IT is Time to be Okay
    And Elevate to a Higher Place


    BEAUTIFUL Sister
     
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