Black Poetry : eff'd up

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hi-wa, May 7, 2002.

  1. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    all because "she wanted to"-
    athousand excuses sounding like
    nothing
    flustering my senses, tormenting my soul
    ph*cking with "mygoodthang"
    for momentary control
    a bold move on my part
    to jumpstart a past fling with
    an old flame while in the arms of wings
    and i can't blame it on being a man.
    actually, i should blame it on not being one
    cause if i was, i would recognize that
    "u.all.i.need.to.get.by" was truly meant for me
    to hear, but for some reason i fear that song
    knowing that the union between us can be strong
    if i just coulda/woulda/shoulda held on.....
    now you're gone
    and i'm stuck on stupid
    knowing exactly where i went wrong
    it's all ph*cked up, and i need u back




    another dome piece flow, c.2002
     
  2. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aight! we can get back togetha!! dang!! :D

    you are a mess, chile!! i am diggin' dis...
    just like i do everythang you bless us wit!

    :heart: itsallLove...
    elayne.
     
  3. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    preciatya sunshyne. u know the
    break up was killin the whole fam, right!?
    glad u approved!

    hw
     
  4. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a will understood sentimate, nice way to drop it in verse though.
     
  5. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx SHAZ,
    for readin and respondin'.
    good to know u poet.
    b.e.z.

    hw
     
  6. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man you dug this out the experience...

    whoa this was tyte.


    nfinite
    j.
     
  7. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    preciateya j.

    glad u dug my style on this one.
    stop by anytime.

    hw
     
  8. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    feeling the flava
    and the pain dun

    feeling the poet

    dss
     
  9. MsBerry_98

    MsBerry_98 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hi-wa... we've all (don't cha'll trip...) walked that walk before. you've captured it quite eloquently here. likes it alot.

    much :heart:
     
  10. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling this
    emotion filled piece.
    Nicely scribed.


    Scribeaboutit!
    CCBSKYN :heart: