Black Poetry : Ebony Coasts

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  1. klabarron

    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I gaze at the sun set
    as my son rises
    and the sun shines
    between the ebony coasts of her thighs.

    On a desert isle
    of sheer passion
    my ship wrecks
    on the ebony coasts between her thigh.

    so beautiful are these
    coasts between her thighs
    that I sigh so wantonly
    at the sight of her desert isle

    shipwreck is preferred
    as she vocally beacons, i heard
    my heartbeat rose into my throat
    as i gazed upon her ebony coasts

    so i traveled.

    following a solitary voice
    that calls me to once
    to indulge my self in sea shores
    her ebony coasts of sunshine
    where she shines
    upon a wearied sailor
    who seeks to rest
    upon her ebony coasts of ecstasy.

    her isle called me to her coasts
    sweet ebony coasts i visited
    until my wearied state of wantonness
    had be fully depleted
    of all it’s vigor
    and i rested upon
    her ebony coasts.
     
  2. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mmmm... i loved the subtle hints of eroticism that
    flowed throughout this peace... thank you for
    sharing. :)

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
  3. klabarron

    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    subtle is good. alluring and enticing. thanks for feelin the brother.
     
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    "I gaze at the sun set
    as my son rises
    and the sun shines
    between the ebony coasts of her thighs.

    On a desert isle
    of sheer passion
    my ship wrecks
    on the ebony coasts between her thigh."

    i just so love the opening of this!! there is just something so serene and having that lighthouse right beside it really helped to take me there. this is a lovely peice.
     
  5. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** very subtle indeed i loved this

    even read it twice to make sure i caught everything

    i would give you my favorite line but i love everything
    about it

    great work
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kla,

    Really good flowin' here brotha!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    fam thx for the love.

    a caged intimacy is beautiful... and exciting.
     
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