Black Poetry : Dying Soul

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When the sun sleeps
    …………. The nightmares come
    And the comfort of my soul hides
    No peace can I find
    Sleeping with the enemy
    Thinking you was my friend
    Loving me…
    But I realize I was wrong
    ………..…I was wrong

    The pain grows and cuts deeper
    Each minute of every hour
    Within seconds my heart dies
    And nothing seems to relieve this pain
    Pretending it don’t bother me
    Wishing you go away
    Leave me at peace

    Why should I live this lie?
    When all you did was harm me
    Mentally and internally
    My soul weeps for love
    My spirit wish you away
    My heart says please walk away

    See it hurts inside
    Cramp unwilling to love
    And the trust has left
    Tired of crying
    Tired of trying
    Tired of pretending
    Let me go
    I am hurting
    And you brought the pain
    As you do your dance
    Pretending you’re on my side

    I can’t take the pain
    You can’t see I am hurting
    You can’t see me
    But only you
    For my heart is lonely
    But I see peace
    At the end of the rainbow


    Only because I am thinking of me now
    And not you…

    (c) 2005
    new vision
     
  2. Monetary

    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Mz Blk Angel

    Pain is expressed very well in this peace.

    :thanks: for sharing your experience with us.

    :toast:
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i know this feeling all to well...
     
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    I imagine pain to be a cloud and I watch it slowly drift away!

    Heartfelt scribe! Loved it!!!!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You described the ache, clearly. But the up side is, you are doing something for self and envisioning that rainbow. Emotive flow.
     
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    pain, is very well expressed with this one. it angered me about the fact of how people can be so cruel when it comes to emotions of the heart, no one should have to experience the pain you put on this page... :hearts2: :kiss1:

    so if this is true or based on something...then get the fool :skillet: you know how we do:)
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Monetary...thank you for the read and love :)

    LovelyGoldenOne..thanks sis

    PurpleMoons..thanks for letting me know ya feel da scribe much love sis

    watzinaname...after the storm the sun do shine indeed...thanks for the love

    nabraska...thank you so much for the read...a writer's heart is full of vision
    within i release only to write

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Now that's the way to end a poem - you go, girl. Put yourself number one. I dig this flow.
     
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    Nothing stays for long...where it's not wanted, not even pain.
    wonderful write up ...I've walked this road so well.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    another beautiful piece of graceful flow
     
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