Black Poetry : Dumb Dawg

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Baby Bird, Sep 3, 2003.

  1. Baby Bird

    Baby Bird Member MEMBER

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    she’s a pathetic puppy
    fetching a phantom stick
    returning to you again and again
    tail wagging, forever panting
    hoping the next toss will be fruitful
    yet she falls for the same tired trick:
    your hand is empty

    she keeps you company
    occupied, busy
    warm
    licking your wounds
    while you stagnate in grief
    you adore her
    appreciate her
    scratch behind her ears
    but to you she’s only a pet,
    a project

    she longs for an equal
    to exchange hearts, hunt treasure
    chase dragonflies
    she dares to dream that you are the one
    capable, compatible, comfortable
    considers showing you the spot
    where she buries her bones

    but you are unreachable
    unyielding
    so she returns to her corner
    curling into herself,
    head on her paws,
    sighing,
    a dog.
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very metaphorical.................but very true

    when applied on many levels...

    well written!
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I also read it on the second level, and love that you thought of that. Welcome to destee!! :wave: :look:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of love
    as i welcome u from above and bless dis
    flow u scribe welcome come inside u kin enjoy :)
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

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    Welcome to destee:toast:
    nice work
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
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    WELCOME Baby Bird

    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
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    lol hey u gots some skill to be droppin ya first and just WHOA lol :) angelicsage had it right this was well-written
    tyte flow...
    keep flowin like this and the board gonna melt :)
     
  7. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Baby Bird... that hit a soft spot. I've been the Dumb Dawg before, but never could quite put the experience into words like you did. You really ripped it. Much love
     
  8. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man, that was deep. Loved the image, felt that way
     
  9. Baby Bird

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    *blush*

    Thanks for the warm welcome, everyone. Lovely lil' community you have here.

    Yeah, sure bites to be the dog.
     
  10. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved this cause it can apply to different situations. So good!
     
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