Black Poetry : Drowning

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  1. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    I’m trapped inside my sea of thoughts
    And I can’t find my voice
    And I’m beginning to feel like
    Drowning is my only choice
    I can feel all my thoughts
    Just waiting for some expression
    But my words are so lost
    Just can’t find the directions
    I want to release these feelings
    And I have so much to say
    But when the words reach the tip of my tongue
    In an instant they get washed away
    I want my pain and my passion
    To flow through this pen
    But every time I start
    I get writers block again
    I keep trying to hop this fence
    That’s guarding all my thoughts
    But it seems like when I try that
    My pants leg always gets caught
    So I’m trapped inside my sea of thoughts
    Just wanting to be free
    Please somebody help me
    Before this sea swallows me
     
  2. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There are not enough words to describe the feeling of not having enough words....or even the right words.

    Thank u 4 posting this.

    As a fellow poet and person I feel this way too often!!!!!

    Again thanks for posting this..it's good to know I'm not alone
    VERY GOOD WRITE!!!!!

    Peace and Love
    twision
     
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    Swim to shore and write some more ~

    I see your talent.
     
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    :terrific: I like your flow and style of poetry. Good expression and passion wrapped in true feelings that are real. I will read more of your flows later. This was another great one by you!
     
  5. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love, i really appreciate it!:qqb018:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thoughts , devine and well done
    Drowing yet knowing...............
     
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    Learn to swim, it could save your life,
    you'll never repeat the same thing twice.
    I like your piece poet.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You certainly captured that feeling, that right on the tip of your tongue feeling. Perhaps you didn't write what you intended to, but your words conveyed such emotion poetess.
     
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    Hey Carameldlite
    Drowning from the sea of thoughts, and feeling lost.
    Your metaphor speaks clearly of how we at times are
    And can become a captive in our only mentality
    It only takes a word whether written or verbal to help
    US to be free. Your pain and passion indeed flows
    From your pen. Something I miss as well. This is an
    Awesome way to over come writer blocks. Just by writing of it.
    Made your passion forever flow

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    Great poem. I have that feeling lots of times. When you think you have something and it seems not to come out right. Oh but when it does it's a great and beautiful thing. Keep writing and you are bound to hit the surface of the sea and swim to shore with a perfect write.
     
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