Poetry Critiques : Drowning in my tears

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Say something fast I am drowning in my tears
    Being without you use to be my biggest fear
    And now that this has finally come to past
    I try to stop the tears from flowing so fast
    I use to laugh when others begin to weep
    But now I am the one can't eat or sleep
    You are my first thought in the morn
    Nightly the last thought that is born
    How do I go on without you by side
    Knowing I will never be your bride
    Lord, how could this be my fate
    Today I just lost my soulmate

    :bye: :bye: :bye: :bye: :bye: :bye: :bye::bye:
     
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    very nice and crafted , great job
     
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