Black Poetry : DROWN & CLAY

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i allow myself,
    to drown in you.
    like pools of flava,
    locked in my mouth.
    you draw me in,
    with your radiant smile--and eyes.
    that keep me locked up,
    in your kisses.
    kisses oh so sweet,
    tender to the touch.
    but just enough,
    to keep me coming back for more.
    your hands hold me,
    or so i think.
    cuz i always thought that i was clay,
    waiting to be molded.
    but you have my heart racing,
    like a pup that's just been scolded.
    and another chapter in my life,
    has opened.
    and i have allowed you,
    to write on me.
    by speaking your words,
    which throws my mind into a frenzy.
    cuz your words are like tattoos,
    piercing my skin.
    again and again,
    but the pain isn't pain.
    it's just you,
    reading me like an open book.
    while all my life,
    i tried to keep it closed.
    but you took my heart,
    and poured it into your soul.
    and that's when the clay started to stiffen,
    cuz i was changing from a little girl--into a lady.
    that knew how to carry herself,
    all bcuz of you.
    you did this to me,
    and like gravy it's all good.
    cuz i'm drowin' in a sea,
    where i'm not helpless.
    and being rescued from the troubles,
    that overshadow my thoughts.
    but no trouble is so overbearing,
    that you can't lift the load.
    you look at my eyelash,


    WHY NOT MY EYES?--------------------i don't know.

    you tell me bcuz it's the simple things,
    that make up the prodigy of society.
    but you are my society,
    and my community.
    turning and twisting me,
    like clay.
    i'm ready to be molded,
    just put your foot on the pedal.
    keep me locked in your kisses,
    and your dreams.
    folks say that i don't know what love is,
    but i know this has to be it.
    cuz i'm drowning,
    and i don't wanna be saved.............. :sand:
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ah to be in love
    yes express it
    "because you are drowning and you don't wanna be save"
    now that is some deep love
    nice smooth flow
    flow on
    Peace~N~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    lovin is sweet when caressed right
    express da inner emotions i don't
    wanna be saved !
    well done here wit expression
     
  4. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you both, your words inspire me. i was thinking of this one the other night, and just started letting the pen do what it does best, flow. :thanks:
     
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    Very, very creative writting style and I must say you did a wonderful job on this one. I enjoyed reading every line. Thanks for sharing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sinking fast and you don't want to be saved, cause your deep in love. I liked your style here, very nice.
     
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    hey somebody in love ahhh so nice
    thanks for sharing with us
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    queentswana, wazinaname, mzblkangel thank you for your replies and the love that you show, it is truly heartfelt. i don't know quite what my style is for this piece, but i'm gonna try doing more like it..........again much love to ya'll......................one love :roll:
     
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    this was such a tyte stanza...
    I loved it... :toast:
    Do yo thang poet!



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