Black Poetry : drenched

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by daroc, Feb 8, 2006.

  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m on a lonely ride up
    Standing on my own step
    Holding on to the rail
    As if it is my only friend
    Riding this escalator to heaven
    a place of success
    Relieving my stress
    Filled with pride
    Independence
    And determination
    I’m on a ride
    Seat belted alone
    No passengers
    No friends
    Alone
    And all I can vision is the end
    How if my ride up
    Was so long, so lonely
    Far in my mind
    Like Thoughts stranded on an island
    Then I know the prize must be great
    Surrounded by others just like me
    Drenched in the essence
    Of being a successful
    Black on a ride alone
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow i like the imagery flow on poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesome how u expressed this...
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel the solitude in this.
    Not really alone, but lonely.
    You painted a great picture here
    Love this piece!


    Peace and love
    twision
     
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    Yes that was deep poet
    Thats escalator leads us
    Yet you have the power
    To erase the loneliness
    Much Love Poet
     
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    Great imagery and write!:heart:
     
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    ibrahim Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awesome Write.
    Peace!