Black Poetry : Dreaming In The Essence Of Reality...

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  1. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    I close my eyes and dream. It seems the birds are singing to me. Whispering in my ear as I walk down a rushing ocean of thoughts flowing through my body. Everything is so colorful in the picture of pleasure.
    I snore..
    A loud.
    you watch me in my sleep. you look into my soul. im walking down route 69. The mountains shine... with the sun setting right behind. Like pastels the sky reflects oranges and yellows melting in with blue. The clouds form you. I watched them drift away. And formulate a resting place. I thrust myself through singing "Smooth Criminal". I float in and out of the essence, humbled in your mist.
    I toss and turn.
    I need another position.
    I'm still in a deep sleep.
    Penetrating...
    Utilizing...
    Mind, body and soul.

    (DREAM CHANGE)

    "we meet again", said my childhood bully and arch enemy.
    code name Iniquity.
    I'm throwing punches aimlessly. Fighting flesh eating fruit with lips of temption that engulfed my shaft of satisfactory. The peach ached in its hunger. I lost all my sanity while being chased by pleasure, fear, and gratifying pain that tingles like the taste of passion upon my tongue. I'm burning within my own heat. Iniquity set my mind on fire burning in the thoughts of desire and cremating my self-conciousness to be moral. fueled by my self-determination to please you.
    They're beautiful...
    My dreams...
    They're like volcanoes erupting, ejecting my virtues.
    I continued to run in my dream. The built up emotions caught grasp of me. within my own realm. I could no longer fight against Iniquity. I envy him. For I can never win, not even within my own dreams. So I opened my eyes and returned to reality.

    Then I let go,

    Inside.

    She said...

    "that was incredible."

    ...
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes... that was quite increditable and surely a wonferful work of art.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    a sweet release a masterpiece tyte flowing
     
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    thanks for the replies.
     
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    ExSreamly Positive- thank you for sharing this!!!
     
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    WOW!
    That was an
    incredible write!
    Thanks for sharing!
     
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    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    what is it that you guys like about it ?
    most people dont uderstand the meaning.
    thanks for the feed back.
    WuN...
     
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    Well!
    It appears that you are making love to a
    women and as you reach your climax
    you realize that you arent wearing a condom.
    you want to pull out but the urge to stay in is to strong.
    So you lose again to temptation.
    Is that it?
     
  9. Manchid

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    Simply Masterful.
    The way you put the metaphors together was wonderful.
    keep it up.
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    In the streets I can greet ya,
    about blunts I teach ya. Inhale
    deep like the words of my breath.
    I never sleep, cause sleep is the
    cousin of death.
     
  10. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    wow...
    youre the first to actually pretty much get the meaning of this purplemoons.
    in the poem im actually trying to stay in as long as i can.
    then i eventually let go.
    and yea i lost to temptation. aka Iniquity.or the lust of sinning.
    and in some parts i tried to just add imagery.
    stay up.

    WuN...
     
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