Black Poetry : Dream Dancin'

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Somebodys daughter in a cheap motel room
    Selling her body so she can shoot to the moon
    Lookin' for a drug-induced place to fall
    Takin' a break when reality calls
    She's dream dancin' and her partner is death

    Somebodys sister standing in an alleyway
    Her pimp's got control, no way she can get away
    Parting with her money, selling her soul
    She's scarred and jaded and her hearts gone cold
    She's dream dancin' and her partner is death

    Somebodys mama in a dimly lit bar
    Drinkin' cheap wine from daylight 'til dark
    Her kids are starving but she don't care
    She has another drink and floats on air
    She's dream dancin' and her partner is death

    Somebodys daughter in a cheap motel room
    Lying on the floor, she didn't make it to the moon
    A needle beside her, white powder on the floor
    She's no longer lookin' for a soft place to fall
    She's dream dancin' and her partner has left

    Somebodys sister standing in an alleyway
    Beaten and abused, she just couldn't get away
    Blood flowing freely from a wound in her chest
    She closes her eyes for a moment to rest
    She's dream dancin' and her partner has left

    Somebodys mama in a dimly lit bar
    A sleaze beside her tryin' to lure her to his car
    He empies a vial into her cheap red wine
    Mama drinks it down, it's the end of the line
    She's dream dancin' and her partner has left

    (c) nfn 2001
     
  2. poeticdelight

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    gGAW!

    *smh*

    this was truly a well written piece


    pd
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    SADLY SPOKEN TRUTH

    WORDZ OF TRUTH HUMBLED MY SOUL
    VERY WELL WRITTEN IN MOTION ~~~~>
    BEAUTIFULLY POETICALLY SPRAYED!:kiss:
     
  4. j'hiah

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    whooooaaaa!!

    and her partner has left to dance with someone else.
    this is xxxxtremely real.

    maaan, i am hooked on writing, no doubt..
    j
     
  5. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    pd...thank you for your comment and support of my work as always...

    Rich..thank you..as always your comment support and encourage me....

    j'hiah...not the kind of partner you really would like to dance with if you had a choice huh..thanks for the read and the words....

    K
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that is i am hooked on yourwriting

    peace..............
     
  7. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now!!!!!

    Much said here that has the ring of truth and knowing--a soul dirge that is at once heartbreaking and uplifting--well done poet--Amun-Ra
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kitana

    Amazingly Visual..sadly soo true...vicious cycle portrayed very well..u never cease !

    peace
    g-man
     
  9. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Amun-Ra....thank you and yes, sadly it is too true...effects of the world we live in..thanks for the read and your comment..much appreciated..

    G-Man...thank you as always for the read and the words...and yes..don't they say our lives travel in circles, but for some, as you say, it's a vicious one....

    K
     
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    kitana...what I love most about your use of rhyme...is the rhythm..never takes away from the powerful messages you often bring..this is pure skill!!

    As I read this piece I thought...where does she go?? This poet who 'knows'...when she wakes up in the morning..."where does she go?"

    I see you mentally walking through life's alleyways...taking visual notes...of what others have been accustomed to...of what they deem to be ordinary...but you poet...you see the extraordinary..and then...you scribe while your heart beats

    *drums*

    :heart:
     
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