Black Poetry : Dragonflies In A Jar.. (a club poem)

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  1. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    narcotic nebulas
    grey black lights; a sex siren
    for testosterone & estrogen traffic.

    shiny body dress
    make a sista's ***
    collidin' disco globes, bouncin'
    like sing-a-long ball
    against bass & percussion

    thighs violently twitch
    swing and jerk, darin' bruthas
    to hurt themselves on those hips;
    an 8 second bullride
    before they're thrown to seclusion
    with their egos wound'd.

    we move
    like smoke
    through a wall of bodies---wet
    from funk climbin' outta pores
    like worms
    outta wet earth.

    we shake our shadows
    across the room, call funk
    through giratin' hips
    and perspiration---
    rainin' against our/ humidity got our clothes
    clingin' like static, bodies battlin'
    the beat like butterflies
    breakin' through their cocoons.

    we shake our bones
    from our flesh, let funk be our new skin
    and scuff the dance floor
    like the faces of our enemies.
     
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    Giovanni

    Ummm boyyyyyy ... :hot: Introduce me to your abstraction ... :hot:

    I have to pace myself erry time I read your ish!! :lol: This piece would somehow go good with my "Would Be (Finale)" we must've been workin' on telepathy today with the club scenario ****!!

    Lovin' ya' work G!!


    Always :heart:

    N2
     
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    Giovanni

    dis is smokin on da club floor
    u took dis to a new stagge......say as often as u like!:eek:
     
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    Peace Brahvah...

    Gio....i definitely felt that club scene here...you painted that picture in front of me through metaphoric imagery abstractly moving in disco light speed. word. nice joint...one thing though..i don't know if this is cuz i've heard your pieces repeatedly or what...but i got a sense that the butterfly coccoon metaphor was repetittive...i could be wrong though and if i am, just disregard my latter babble.

    this was Gio-Phat.

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    peace and blessings unto you..
    always,
    anita j.
     
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