Black Poetry : DRAFT 1 - will complete later

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  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Insane Gang

    I can't contain the pain
    and rage, my whole gangs gone insane
    the less time i spend
    focused on them
    the easier it is to see
    a lot of what's been going on
    i have noone to blame but me
    and my own inadequacies

    not that you all haven't done your part
    to make me feel worthless, tearing me down, pulling me apart
    leaving me dazed and confused
    feeling again battered and used
    Family when you need it
    how convenient
    but I continue to stand before you and accept this treatment
    wondering why you're talking isht bout me
    when your life is falling apart, its easy to see
    how you shift attention on what you believe is easy prey
    but, a target no more, I have a lot to say
    so for once stop moving your lips and pull up a chair
    after all the isht you've said about me, this is only fair

    Let's start at the bottom and move our way up:

    To those without faces and who barely have names
    why speak on repeat, what's duplicated is lame
    and to those women who love me when I am standing with a brotha
    same act like they don't know me is he is absent or with anotha
    sister, suffice it to say, are you that worried he likes my lighta *** betta
    it don't matter to me, but to let you know, jealousy makes me wetter
    and you the one who looks stupid standing with your face getting redder
    so the next time you see me working my game at the club
    why don't you stop worrying about me and tend to your own scrub

    And to the men, you know who you are, if ya gotta ask - we neva met
    for just moments spent with me and I leave a poetic impression you'll neva forget
    So stop stepping to me with bull$hit lines
    I'm not enticed by words spit from lying lips or rumors as red as wine
    take off those shades, whats wrong it's midnight dark inside
    i want to see the look on your face when i explain the difference between you and I
    is like a continental divide

    And moving on to those who feel they know me well
    whatever you think you know, most likely, ain't half my hell
    and the good half of what makes me me I have sure hid
    women don't understand that to keep things good can't let noone under your lid
    so the next time you get together and you missing me and my bag of black
    and can only bunch together lies from half truths a quarter of which were true
    why don't you worry about you and the truths you hide
    before I blast you back without telling lies
    see, your sisters, they rat you out, the minute your gone
    laughing at your real pains, and its here I become withdrawn
    you see, no matter what you've said about me
    i refuse to lower myself to your degree
    until I walk a mile in your broke *** knock off shoes
    i will never pretend to know what its like to sing your blues
    you should be happy that i don't know your type of pain
    but don't claim to know me while hoovering cocaine

    And to Tony's girl, whomever you may end up to be
    read the below, our relationship is nothing but sibling love to me
    to him, however, our love is everything
    he tells me all the time, one day i will wear his ring
    So, woman, we can play this two ways:
    be real to my face for I am here to stay
    or don't speak at all, either way Tony and I'll be okay
    but let me know if I'm infringing on your space
    and with all honesty I'll back out of that place
    but, with all due respect, if I make the above guarantee
    please, just let Tony be Tony, it's what makes him he.

    And Tony, seriously, can you do serious for only a minute,
    I know that they feel like I am using you
    but they don't know how it is between us two
    I've never been nothing to you except honest and real
    for the feelings you have I simply don't feel
    crazy, I know, when you're the one always there for me
    i'm not being selfish though, together we're free
    from the surrounding drama, bullisht and strife
    while making eachother laugh through the crazy times in our lives
    But, you'll never be truly happy if you keep looking for true love here
    But our kind of love is forever, can I make this anymore clear?

    Foxy Aunt Roxie with zero moxie
    fixing herself to to men with epoxy
    family hugs and love to my face
    while behind my back you attempt to disgrace
    chomping on ice and spreading lies
    you ain't trying to do nothing but get that everyday high
    from whomever can put up with your loud *** mouth and twenty in change
    your jealous of everyone cuz you always out of your range

    Sloane I am way too grown to put up with your lack of retention
    two drinks and a hit and of course she'll forget, or is it her lack of attention
    so when she opens her mouth thoughts become twisted and fall out
    a pathological liar to get out of fire or to look smart and spout
    introducing me to her "friends" so I should kiss her *** to no end
    what she doesn't quite comprehend is i don't have time to pretend
    for some random men she picks up in the bar or on the street
    why when she's doing great on her own does she feel so imcomplete
    for any descent man who pays attention she merely looks like variety meat.

    So why is it after i say all this do i still hold a place for all of you
    it seems like whenever i am down you are always there to turn to
    to remind myself of where i came from and who i am and how far i've come
    to know that in your presence i never have to succomb
    remember that comfort is in knowing your surroundings
    it doesn't matter that every once in a while you take a pounding.
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    for a draft i like it..flow on
    cant wait till ya done if its good now..
    look out :angel1:
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice finish it
    this was on hit flow on
     
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    you was not something
    with piece right here
    please finish it...you're story
    is like too many nowdays
    truth is eternal...
    peace
    khasm
     
  5. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    still a work in progress, added a couple more stanzas, thanks for the love above.
     
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    ahhh wow
    this is tight
    yes please do
    finish this scribe sis
    Peace
     
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    this is sooo tight, Randee - can't wait ta see how ya finish it up.
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that's my girl Randee...

    Girl...your emotions are as deep as the core of the earth...
    and your writing...quickly pulls me in
    man...I'll def' be looking for the continuation...
     
  9. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    finished up something old.
     
  10. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    finshed up this piece to read tonight.
     
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