Black Poetry : Don't Let Me Go

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  1. theDynasty1979

    theDynasty1979 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I know
    I said a lot of things about how
    I don't need you now
    Big independent me
    Miss I-Can-Do-Everything
    I know
    You tried to love and support the monster I became
    No matter how much I changed
    Your love stayed the same
    Chiseled brick walls
    molded diamond rough
    I just figured I could do whatever
    Since you loved me so much
    Took for granted
    All the times you couldnt even speak your pain
    My ignorance was so plain
    Young mind so untrained
    untamed
    Didnt know the first thing about love
    Instead of giving what you needed
    I tried being what you fantasized of
    I didn't really know
    You were suffering on the inside
    While I trampled your pride
    The light inside you slowly died
    And I laughed while you cried
    Apologies insufficient for the monster I was
    Nothing I ever do will be deserving of your love
    But here I stand
    Soul naked
    Eyes wise
    No more hate
    No more lies
    Trying my damndest to change
    So if you could just please stay
    One more night
    We can talk
    Or
    You can listen
    And I can plead
    You are a helluva good man-
    Please don't give up on me!!!
    --peacebewith
    --MsDy
    (copywrite2004)
     
  2. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "Don't know what you got til' it's gone"Yes you gotta slow down and listen maybe forget about yourself for a moment.....
    that was good I really liked this piece :jumping: :jumping:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very well said! So true
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love this poem, very nice piece
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, I am feeling this one, regret can be a killer, I love the way you posed this.
     
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    amberly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i've been here a few times, very nice plea, dig your poem
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    at some point we all cross into this path but fine way back
    nicely expressed
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep scribe
    nice drop
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is so tight. I hope it all turns out the way you want it to.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is very heartfelt. things will work out they way they are supposed to. it may not be the way you want them to but its Gods plan.
     
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