Black Poetry : Don't Know What to Call You Anymore!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sarcasm4eva, Jul 21, 2004.

  1. sarcasm4eva

    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lovin you is like a battle,
    Except we both don't end up w/scars.
    I'm the one who continuously falls.
    I've been lovin you for so long,
    I don't know how to stop.
    Why am I fightin this battle and for what?
    Can't call this a battle,
    If only one person is fightin.
    So what am I fightin for?
    Knowin I'll only end up w/scars...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    it take two ta rumble if one is forth effort
    and one not time to let the battle go !
    tyte drop i feel ya on dis
     
  3. 7thPoet

    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a painful piece
    it made me wish i could help...

    keep writing...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can't force a person to fight, you can only show them that you're up for the battle. I felt the sadness in this piece.
     
  5. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice piece, and as far as ending up with scars? ...it was an sub-concious scar that caused this piece, bottom line is this: scars run deep within..then hits the surface.
     
  6. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    UR poem was short and sweet yet got a message out. Keep posting and ill keep reading. :read:




    *~Be careful wut u choose to do in lyfe becuz sum1 maybe followin ur footsteps~*
     
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