Black Poetry : Dominatrix

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    hearts break
    every day
    the pieces fall wherever

    far from lame
    so i don't fall for game
    love play me...never

    my february feelings
    are bound in leather
    and chains
    love is a dominatrix
    turned on by the kind of hatred
    that drives good men insane

    she wears a mask
    hiding behind sex faces
    and calls each victim out his name
    call me soft
    look at me strange
    but I have low tolerance
    for such tormenting pain

    how could I trust
    someone that beats me up
    for fun
    your freak
    won't be me
    even if I have 2 cheeks
    you lost me at strike number 1

    love don't love nobody
    even fools know better
    i've survived enough valentines
    both the pain
    and the pleasure
    to learn that she will shower you with tears
    so keep your heart's umbrella

    on stand by
    don't fall for the tricks
    stand up guy
    guard your heart
    because those temporary hellos
    come with permanent good bye
    scars
     
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    whewwwww!!!
    I know this all so well , been there a time or two
    now my heart search for what is really true
    i'm now what is called protected '''

    Awesome scribe Nitty
     
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    Brother Poet NittyGrit,

    Great stuff here. Love that you made the distaste for love into something sexy. The subject in this piece shares his many colorful components of pain. But in the end I smiled. He may believe he's done with love but I don't believe love is done with him. Marvelous read.

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    Greetings Totalview,

    That you for the creative feedback...it made me smile. As a man I know what its like to be all big and bad and "put my foot down", but a sucker for love is a sucker for love...no matter how bad he thinks he is.

    Thank you again for the feedback.
     
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    Greetings Brother Poet NittyGrit,

    You are more than welcome. I knew the subject in your piece was a big ole softy, blowing all that hot air. (smile) Smiles are infectious, keep passing yours around.
     
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    Greetings Brother Poet NittyGrit,

    You are more than welcome. I knew the subject in your piece was a big ole softy, blowing all that hot air. (smile) Smiles are infectious, keep passing yours around.
     
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