Black Poetry : Doing What is Neccessary

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by rhymebad, Feb 23, 2009.

  1. rhymebad

    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Doing What is Neccessary

    Up in the morning get a corrupt warning then grab the day
    Have my say need a bold witness my whole business sway
    Toward rapping must test the absurd when I express in words
    Flow cool and yummy owe the school money debt for the birds
    Need more rhymes on my shorelines enough to be wet and tough
    Like the Gulf, like a wild wolf howl in style with a prolong
    Tone bark at domes and mark the chrome rims and roll on
    Got a wet grin ready to let in happiness winner of fame
    And hope will entertained folks even in parking lots flame
    With sparking hot lyrics, now in Walmart shopping hard
    Need extreme support like the supreme court no subpar
    Decisions can be made I stand afraid of being a club star
    Pleasure the treasure see a chick must be quick she’s hot
    Tight skirt made the night perk with beauty need a plot
    Must speak to the sweet, freaked convinced obsolete in
    A sense love to kiss her feet in suspense “boo how you been?
    Look girl you wet for me can’t let it bee wanna kiss
    Your lips, attractive cutie and active with booty wanna twist
    Some sheets and cum deep and that’s after the panties drop
    Living in peace is nice but an increase in price knock
    Holes in pockets my goal is to stop it before that slop
    Take bread off the table then my head not able to think
    Because I’ll be lonely and hungry under the kitchen sink
    Become a hot target like the stock market money rise
    And fall then its all gone being broke is no funny surprise
    Need pay in advance just to stay with a chance of survival
    In a trance since my arrival enhance societal restraints are suicidal
    Grab a thick book have a quick look at the pages of success
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    all right den !!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Doing what you need to do, no matter what comes your way. Keep expressing yourself rhymebad.
     
  4. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What is necessary to do?

    What is necessary to do?
    Love! Serve God! Act like your not from a zoo!
    Is there more that we should know?
    Do good but don’t do good for show!

    “About my poem what have you to say?!!”
    Well MR. Rhymebad its Okay!
    You know me I’m not much of a critic.
    And if I talk too much you’d think I was sick!!

    So let’s just let okay stand for now
    Let not your work to be soil and me the plow
    You see it’s been long since I’ve been around
    No sense in being kicked out of this town.

    I am sure if any one knows what I mean
    It is you and that poet Queen!
    So I’ll stop by every now and again
    Just pray! I don’t comment a ban worthy sin!

    (LoL at verse I write)
    I’m older and working on being polite.
    So away I go for a time!
    Rhymebad this will help your rhyme!




    Enjoy peace where ever you find it!

    ALPHA MALE
     
  5. rhymebad

    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks to everybody for the props and critique(and alpha male my script rhyme about three times more than yours you only rhyming on the end son what up?)
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brother ALPHA MALE,
    The Poetry Get Your Flow On forum, is not the place for critique. We do have a Critique Forum that's available to you, should you want to offer positive pointers to a poet's work.
    Your response to Brother rhymebad, was not in any way positive:
    Brother Alpha Male, this is a formal warning. Offering a poet a link where his/her rhymes can be "helped" is way out of line. The link has been removed, moreover, this post is in direct opposition to our first Forum Rule which states:

    Rule # 1. RESPECT IS NUMBER ONE IN OUR HOUSE - Respect for yourself, each Member of this Family, their opinions, and the peace we've been blessed with. No personal attacks will be tolerated. If in our opinion, you are being disrespectful, it will be dealt with accordingly, up to and including being banned.
    Thanking you in advance for not allowing this happen again.

    Moderator Watz
     
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