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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by queentswana, Nov 14, 2004.

  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    DOCTOR
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    I been feeling sick, been feeling real bad,
    it's the worst kind of pain ...I ever had.
    ~~~*~~~
    I called the doctor, to ease my pain,
    please hurry up doc ...I'm going insane.
    ~~~*~~~
    My mind keep saying, just hold on to faith,
    and get a grip ...before it's too late.
    ~~~*~~~
    Doc, sometimes I feel like, I'm on my way out,
    and I don't even know ...what my life was about.
    ~~~*~~~
    So what's the cure doc? ...how much is my fee?
    or is it beyond ...any help for me?
    ~~~*~~~
    Well, your heart is damaged, but I caught it in time,
    so get plenty of rest ...and a peace of mind.
    ~~~*~~~
    The doctor said, as he hand me the bill,
    what you really need ...is a "wake-up" pill.
    ~~~*~~~
    Thank you doc, your bill woke me up,
    but still glad I took a sip ...from your "wisdom cup.
     
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    Sometimes our minds can just be whipped, to where physical pain would actually be a welcome relief. You added a touch of humor at the end, I wasn't expecting that. This had a flair to it, keep those flows coming.
     
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    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Yes the end did take a turn ...lol and I enjoyed writting it, thanks for the luv
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for dropping in.
     
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    At times thas just how it be..this was a very real poem and i enjoyed it as i enjoy all your poems.....now we need to talk to the Doc about that bill
    wheeeew...lol
    Tight flowing my sister

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    girl, that bill put hole in my soul ...lol
    thanks always for the luv angel heart
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Amen now this what we need right here
    is the Doc in .....this was awesome and
    send a deep message to me .
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes, thats so true...it was a very deep message indeed. thanks always for your luv and support.
     
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    we all need a wake up pill at times...
    too many of us sleep walk thru life
    missing the truly beautiful things as
    we pass them by...enlightening piece
    one love
    khasm
     
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