Black Poetry : Do You Understand?????

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  1. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I know this isn’t rocket science or trigonometry
    But I do not think you are understanding me
    I told you I would wait here patiently
    but yet you still have not come for me
    I know you want me to stay right here inside your
    Comfy love box but the truth of the matter is
    The clock is going tick tock
    And I’m growing tired and weary bcuz although
    You say you love me too
    I can no longer wait for something that my mind
    Heart and soul can’t see and that would be you and me
    We can talk for hours about anything or nothing at all
    And even when we’re mad at each other nothing never changes
    Our connection is the real thing baby
    That will last through the ages
    Im trying to add new pages to our love story
    but I need some help from you
    it seems like you have writer’s block
    because the last page you wrote read nothing but …
    Like to be continued…Iwill be right back after this special message…
    Sure….you always come back to me…but never for me
    There’s a difference you see
    Your going to make me walk away from you
    after all we’ve been through
    they say patience is a virture
    I wonder what they would do if they were in my shoes
    Does it feel like I’m pressing you?
    Good…..because I am ….
    It would be different if this was some
    Wham bam thank you mame scam
    But its not, Im talkn about you and me
    A promising future and beautiful memories
    This thing is not that complex but yet
    You always have me all stressed and vexed
    Because you get stuck and forget that
    I love you….
    And that’s the reason when you reach out for
    I am there for you
    Do you really understand?
    I know you’re a very intelligent man
    That can figure out the most complex equations
    But how come you do not comphrend
    Simple math
    You + Me =Us/We which translates into
    Happy You and Happy Me multiplied by
    365 days which = an Eternity of
    Me loving You and You loving Me
    Is that too much for your mind to handle?​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    you + me = Us a we together translated into happiness
    yes baby yes love this one and it had me in smiles wow!!

    it was a bit small and kinda hard to read but i went deep and took it right in da heart !
     
  3. FattnBeautiful

    FattnBeautiful Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really enjoyed reading this. I like the last few lines,
    "Simple math
    You + Me =Us/We which translates into
    Happy You and Happy Me multiplied by
    365 days which = an Eternity of
    Me loving You and You loving Me
    Is that too much for your mind to handle?"
    Great Poem.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, you broke this down and made it elementary, took the poetic hammer and hit the nail directly on the head. If he doesn't understand now, will he ever? Welcome back, poetess.
     
  5. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    watz:
    You know sometimes the smartest of the smart
    displays actions that do not reflect their intellect
    and you have to break it down like that.:)
    As always its a pleasure to have you
    stop by. Thanks for the luv


    $$RICH$$:
    Thank you for your constant luv
    and kind words it is much appreciated


    FattnBeautiful:
    Thank you very much for the read
    and the luv. I have been enjoying
    your work as well.:)



    Much Luv to you all
     
  6. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I definitely UNDERSTAND!

    This piece has inspired me! I understand more than you know...GREAT JOB!
     
  7. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes we can get so relaxed in our love until sometimes we forget to do a re-fresher course every now and again.
    Good to hear something from you.
    Great piece poet.
     
  8. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The ending is so powerful, puts the period at the end of a strong and complex sentence. A lot of people do understand, but it's too much child in alot of us and not enough adult
     
  9. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HopelisRomantic:
    Wow...thank you very much for
    your words of kindness. It really
    touched me to read the piece inspired you.



    queen, queen, queen:
    Thank you very much and yes
    it has been a while since I have
    posted a piece life has been going
    on as usual but I always have those
    moments when the feeling hits me
    and I have to let it out. You know I
    always enjoy you stopping by.
    BTW...your new avitar...I love it.


    Phenomenon:
    You know you maybe right
    I don't know what it is but
    I do know weight/wait broke the
    wagon....Thank you for the read and
    your kindness

    Much Luv to you all
     
  10. Bluewater

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    Hi 4EVERLUV
    Very cool poem sis.
    It reminds me of a good scolding,
    In a humorous, yet serious way.
    Becuase like you said. You just
    want to add new pages to your love
    story. Write on sis.
    Very nice read

    Peace~N~Love
     
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