Black Poetry : Do U Ever Wonder??

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  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Do u ever wonder...
    what im doing?
    who I'm with?
    what I'm looking at?

    Do u ever wonder...
    what we'll be in the future?
    If there will ever be a future?
    If you're on my mind?

    Do u ever wonder...
    If I miss you from time to time?
    If my poems are about you or someone else?
    If you're wasting ur time?

    Do u ever wonder...
    If I'm awake or asleep in the middle ofthe night?
    Who is kissing me, touching me, loving me?
    If they do it right?

    Because I do...
     
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    Heartfelt Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, poeticlyspeakin, I do wonder about these things. This poem describes my sentiments exactly, and it gives me something I can relate to. I really appreciate you speaking my mind when I don't have the courage to sometimes. Once again, nice piece.
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOL... uh no problem. Thank you for reading and replying. Maybe one of these days u should get the courage...
     
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    this is beautiful and somber, poeticlyspeakin.

    it's both a relief and awkward to see my thoughts in your poem.

    give us more, please.
     
  5. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'll try thank u baby bird
     
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    tyte scribe i must say i wonder too
    it's like u was reading my mind
     
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    poeticlyspeakin... Thanks for this.

    This catches and takes me into thoughts I am trying to forget.
    I'm searching my memories now. I'm asking.

    Am I on her mind?

    I often wonder...
    Does she miss me from time to time?

    I often wonder...
    Is she awake or asleep in the middle of the night?
    Who is kissing her, touching her, loving her?

    If they are doing it right?

    Is she happy.
    This means a lot.

    Memories of her is all I got.

    Actually these memories keep me going.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this right her
    like you read my mind...
    wonderin we all do...
    tight flow my brother...
     
  9. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my brother?? lol i didnt know i was a guy...lol but thanks....
     
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    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a very interesting read....... tyte as always
     
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