Black Poetry : DO NOT ENTER

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  1. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Warning this is lengthy






    Do Not Enter

    Let this linger in your mind

    I love you I love you I love you

    A song cry
    I’ve heard for so long
    Through these hollow walls
    After he did his wrong or wanted something
    She was ready to leave him
    And then he would plead:

    I love you I love you I love you

    She fell deep into his touch
    And he led her to heaven
    And she thought
    Why am I even leaving him?
    The song cry worked like a charm
    I stayed in my apt right next to theirs
    The headboard bangin’ was enough to let me know he had gotten his way

    Let’s call her Tasha
    And him
    We’ll call him Sean
    The world came crashing on Tasha’s shoulders
    Tasha sat on the bathroom floor
    With the door locked behind her
    Musing about her relationship with Sean
    And how it reached to this turning point
    She’s so discombobulated right this minute
    Crying about what she saw
    As what could have been
    A good relationship

    Tasha met Sean at a bangin’ party in Brooklyn
    She was susceptible to his virile nature
    As he with her slender physique
    They both engaged in good discussion
    Exchanging numbers in the end
    After 3 months of getting to know each other
    Tasha finally decided to move in after countless invitations from Sean

    That’s when the beginning of all her afflictions started
    Tasha, after being with Sean for two years now
    Knew she hadn’t given herself to Sean completely
    She was untouched, but she still remained until that night
    Tasha could only run from his libido for so long
    She wanted it just as bad
    After all she loved him
    He did love her
    He always told her:

    I love you I love you I love you

    So that night Sean took away her virginal innocence
    Worshipping every crevice of her body
    Giving her vigorous tremors leading to her release
    She felt complete, now a woman
    Not knowing that this act of anticipated invasion
    Would lead to Sean’s betrayal towards her

    Over next few months Sean never treated Tasha the same
    She found numbers in his pockets
    Women started calling the house asking for him
    He came home late one night
    With the scent of another woman’s perfume
    Stained in his clothes
    She knew he was cheating and this night
    He found Tasha crying on the pillow
    She said she was leaving him
    And so he said:

    I love you I love you I love you

    He claimed he was sorry, she meant nothing
    No matter what the situation was he knew how to make her forget
    HE KNEW HER BODY WOULD BETRAY HER
    He sent shock waves through her womanly essence she was
    Falling into the trap of her body’s response to Sean
    But in reality she waited
    Waited for him to become so ready
    Made him think she wanted this
    Made him think she was foolish
    That she would relinquish her body to him for the umpteenth time
    Forgiving him once more
    She braced herself
    Sean was ready
    He shielded himself
    Thought he was being welcomed home
    To the sweetness of his hypnotic penetration
    Then Tasha’s expression changed
    And she let out a song cry saying:

    I’m leaving you, I’m leaving you, I’m leaving you

    I’m not yours anymore
    You’re trespassing
    So…..Please
    DO NOT ENTER
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I didn't find this piece to be too long. It was posed so that it held my interest. I figured she would leave, and was intrigued to know what would bring her to that point. Such a well written narrative.
     
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    Very nice, no story book ending here.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said don't enter this way out !
     
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    Thank you everyone...im glad you liked it
     
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    this is beautiful your pen is filled with love and wisdom :hearts4:
     
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    Wow..here's a ^5 for Tasha, excellent piece...with a note of...
    "after you get rid of me...who will the next fool be?" ...nice piece poet
     
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    I love you, i love you, i love you

    Thanks ofr sharing that, it was simply marvelous.. i started in the middle to see if i wanted to go to the end, I ended up reading it 2x becasue it was twice as nice. thanks once again.. simply beautiful flow. :coffee:
     
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