Black Poetry : Dividing Actions like Fractions

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Randee, Oct 31, 2003.

  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deception of her heart
    led to misconceptions from the start
    wondering where he been
    is her remission of sin
    he constantly dreamin and schemin
    lies a steady streamin
    hot like grease
    his sputtering,
    stuttering lines need to cease
    tying her down while he walks away
    minutes become hours turn into days
    how much more will she accept before
    she realizes he treats her like his whore
    neva gentle
    twisting her mental
    when he wants and needs
    its here where he feeds
    off life knowing she will neva
    deny his lies and actions
    dividing her mind like fractions
    enabling the aggressor
    to continue to suppress her
    tearing her down leaving her out
    with constant swirling visions of doubt
    so many men want to be with her
    she thought he held her hearts cure
    giving up on all that be
    seems she can neva see
    so why try
    lead only to cry
    heartache and pain
    efforts in vain
    at the end only she remains.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice ......only she remains !
    this flow was all in my mental
     
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    really nice flow, Randee - you have been missed girl.
     
  4. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah, i have missed you guys too, but good news is new job, new start in life. cuttin everyone else but destee out.
     
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    I like this
     
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    wonderful this is truly wonderful
    nice flow
    Peace
     
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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    can't be with him when i know i deserve so much more.
     
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    omg...

    this is sooo tyte. I love it!!
     
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    words that every man should pay attention to
     
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    i dont know how i miss this one...
    oh the mental vibe..
    this was so well posed...^5 girl..
    this was tight... :angel1:
     
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