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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by aven, Jan 26, 2004.

  1. aven

    aven Member MEMBER

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    empty promises
    broken heart and broken bones
    and endless tears

    i try to excape the
    cycle of
    passion and pain

    if not for my sake
    then for the sake
    of my son & the man he will become

    i think back on the
    same excuses spoken time
    after time and wonder

    when i stasrted to
    believe the lise i told
    that it won't happen again

    :( :( :( :(
    that i deserved to be
    treated like less
    then a human beeing

    or when i realized i'd
    prefer to be dead then
    forced to shasre your bed.
    feel your touch

    when i dreaded waking up

    when you started clling me
    your ****

    when my fear brought you
    joy

    and my pain gave you pleasure

    and once i was gone
    excape wasn't enough

    living like a fugitive
    running from the law

    when my only crime wa loving
    someone who didn't know love
    wasn't supposed to hurt

    writing prose from behind bars
    cause freedom didn't make me
    free

    smelling the gun smoke when i
    sleep seeing your blood flow freely
    across the sheets

    wondering how a gun got in my hand
    worst of all feeling relivedat your last
    breath

    dam what you reduced me to
    i look in the mirror and see
    a reflection of you.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome Aven,

    Getting in touch with your feelings by writing has revealed a great inner talent that possesses you. I want to encourage you to release yourself through that gift. Throw yourself completely into it, looking up words when necessary. Peace.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was well felt making contact wit ya self is the healing
    keep flowin i'm listening
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feeling this emotional flow, writing can be freeing, keep that pen going.
     
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    straight vividness...
    and some [email protected] good analogies...
    please keep flow'n
    one love
    khasm
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aven,
    A sad and too often true story told poetically well with flowing lines.

    Welcome and if this is of you may you be blessed with healing through your gift of poetic expression.

    Peace and Blessings
     
  7. aven

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    thank you all for your words of encuragement. i just wanted to express a feeling for a situation that happens all to often. im glad if it touched you. again thanx
     
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