Black Poetry : Distant Friend

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Feb 15, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Distance never was a barrier,
    To keep our spirits from connecting,
    Affecting one another.
    From words composed,
    Our personalities were exposed,
    And each of us saw something that we liked.
    Similar backgrounds and lifestyles,
    Were magnetic forces, that made it hard to see,
    Any causes for us to look at each other indifferently.
    My temple you have yet to observe,
    You know, to take note of my swerves and curves,
    Which are many, but that should not matter,
    Now should it?
    Me, enjoying this journey to get to know you better,
    And liking when you show up in my inbox,
    Indicating that I have received a letter,
    From my distant friend in Philadelphia,
    Which I have been waiting on forever…
    The letter I mean.
    Your mentality, your morals, your admiration for God,
    Your talents basically are mine,
    I just hope that the friendship can stand the test of time,
    And the distance of our existence.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Seems like your souls have already meshed despite the distance. I liked the way you flowed with this.
     
  3. Bluewater

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    friendship..the way you drop this flow...it seem like this is a wonderful friendship that will strenghten from the distance
    nice one
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    friendship is beautiful
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was a nice piece.....I thought it was very well posed
     
  6. ckei

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    Cool piece, I like it....

    The call comes, the one that we both feared.
    I get up and change, lace up my boots and don my gear.
    It's not even sunrise, yet the house is abuzz with movement,
    The frown on my wife sums it up as I get ready for deployment.

    Another country in struggle, a new land to get used to
    Here we go again, saving a useless dictator from a coup.
    I look at my daughters, as they lay sound asleep
    All the while I listen as my wife tries not to weep.

    I give her a look, to reassure that her man will be alright,
    I have to be strong, even if I am rigid with fright.
    Will this be the last time, off marching in this strange land,
    defending someone's liberties, being in a place I can't stand.

    I chose this profession, to defend my nation from this mess,
    yet we're stuck in a cycle that's got us in everyone else's craziness.
    Yet, continue to press on, while others sit safely at home
    complaining about their jobs, while I'm dealing with some "country gone wrong."

    Constant prayers, flow thorugh my mind, to keep all of us from harm
    "I hope God's lookin' out for a brotha," make it back to my wife's arms.
    I do this because I want to beleive that what we do is right,
    so that my wife and kids will be safe and sleep secure at night....

    peace
     
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