Black Poetry : Distance

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  1. Lataisha Nicole

    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Distance
    In the distance I see daisies blowing in swift winds
    Tall trees that stand triumph showing rings revealing ancestors dreams
    A sweet message it sends
    Telling of when time began
    Offering old and alike new finds
    Shade for the children that sit beneath its branches
    Laughing while singing nursery rhymes
    It speaks of a time when life was really good
    Not because of monetary riches
    Because monetary riches there were not
    But riches never the less came in abundance
    Disguised in hot food
    Shared from love filled Dutch pots
    Clean clothes that were thoroughly cleaned
    No Cheers, no Tide, no washing machine
    Just a time in history when used shoes felt fine
    And ripe mangos and sugar water were the equivalent to aged wine
    Special are the memories of how we played
    No Toys R Us for us, because the because toys were all hand made
    In the distance was daddy laughing and slamming bones
    So safe and secure under mommies apron
    The last thing I pondered was being grown
    Life was serene and sweet
    Sitting on a porch by a basin tub
    Rubbing the soles of momma’s feet as my sister brushed her hair
    I look back into yesterday and sometimes wish that I was still there
    Where we climbed trees and swam far across the lake
    And trips to the next town was always like wow
    YES, a good life does simple things create
    In the distance I see pasture and meadow that go on for days
    And I’m taken aback the beauties they hold
    And each glance is like the first glance and I am always amazed
    At how when I used to look out to the distance
    I simply couldn’t have asked for more
    Funny though, how any onlooker would have swore
    That we were poor
    I sit reminiscent in the fondness that I find
    When I look into the distance
    Of time
    Lataisha Nicole
     
  2. Clyde C Coger Jr

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa and Chocolate Thunder!

    Poetess Lataisha Nicole,

    This piece really hit home for me, boy do I remember!

    No Cheers, no Tide, no washing machine

    In the distance was daddy laughing and slamming bones

    And trips to the next town was always like wow

    Funny though, how any onlooker would have swore
    That we were poor


     
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    Poetess, your word choice is excellent, provides us with a crisp view of this serene scene of what's truly important in life. Wonderful piece, very much enjoyed.
     
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    well stated and expressed as i look back in da distance of tyme !
     
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    DISTANCE is poetic irony at its best.

    THANKS!
     
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    Im with brother Clyde on this one :)

    Really took me back to the simple joys we had growing up

    I am thoroughly enjoying your pen my sister :)

    Cant wait for more :read:
     
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    Oh how you made some memories come rushing back! But, your descriptive language in this evoked the very imagery you reminisced.

    This piece reminded me of Stevie Wonder's song, "I wish those days could come back once more. Why did those days eva have to go?!"

    And your words made me go "Mmm-Hmmm" and "Ahhhh" like settling into a warm bath.
     
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    In the Spirit of Sankofa and the Family!





    Well, thank you my sister friend for being with me on this one, its rare that someone is brave enough to lline up with me, wow, I'm too flattered, lol:). Seriously, this is too trill Triniti424, for real.

     
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    Lataisha:
    Such a beautiful write and I especially liked....



    Funny though, how any onlooker
    would have swore That we were poor
    I sit reminiscent in the fondness that I find
    When I look into the distance
    Of time


    The things money can't buy.

    Much Luv
     
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