Black Poetry : Dinner at 8

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Beautiful18, Jun 2, 2004.

  1. Beautiful18

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    This morning you told me to write in a poem
    How I feel about you
    You asked me to have it done and
    Bring it with me when we go out to dinner
    You kissed me and smiled and left out the house
    I grabbed a pen and started pouring
    My heart out
    I don’t think I love you or
    was ever in love with you
    Its not you, its me
    Is such a cliché but its honesty
    In all reality
    I’m not attracted to you
    Not interested in you
    And could care less about how life will treat you
    I sound like a straight up b*tch
    But today I said I’ll let my fingers write freely
    Without putting any thoughts into it
    And let my hands tell what I’m really thinking
    I said if I started with a love poem it, must be love but as I’m reading and writing I see
    I was right, I’ve been tagging you along
    Like you’re a third wheel
    Amazingly its not about anyone else
    It’s just about you,
    I lied to myself making up
    all types of feelings and emotions for you because I was so desperate for
    A companion
    I’ve taken advantage of your money, love, and kindness,and compassion
    I’ve filed you with false hopes and pre meditated broken promises
    I don’t wanna be with you forever, you are not my other half
    You could be out finding the right one going on dates
    Trying to meet your real soul mate
    Instead you’re thinking ur with your wife to be
    The whole time I’m thinking he's not the one for me
    I believe in karma and I know I’ll get mind
    But Until then you have got to go
    Cause I just wrote what my heart says and I’m sorry but I have wasted your time


    This morning my man asked me to write a poem cause every time we go out I read him a poem over dinner but today he asked me to write freely just speak off my heart and this is exactly what came out, I was feeling this since forever I just blocked it out but this is what my hands really wrote on their own it was so weird. I can’t even explain it. This is gonna be some dinner tonight
     
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    well felt the deep emotions from within ya heart
    expressing & venting
     
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    Some dinner is not the half of it...But, you wrote what you felt, and that can't be ignored for sure. Just hope this doesn't catch him totally by surprise. This was very expressively flowed....quite well written.
     
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    :eek:hmy: ,this poem grabbed my attention :lol:
    Good good writing and I love the emotion
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WooWee...what straight poetic lines you have...it was like reading a novel - live. :spin:
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Simply gorgeous. I'm digging this.
     
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    Honesty...is always best
    even if it's poetic...
    this scribe def' held
    my attention.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang this is tyte...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    Yes it held my attention as well, but...should not that poem had came sooner? did you know, it "hurts" to be hurt? and that needless hurt is even worst? I do however think the poem should have been presented...but the dinner at 8, along with the poem... should have been before "feelings" came into play. Sometimes our heart is..."our weakest link"

    but outside of the fact, this is a beautiful poem, I must say I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing it with us and do let us know the outcome, good luck.

    quote for a life-time:
    In every house, there's at lease ONE door...that "swings" both ways.
     
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    revisit........
     
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