Black Poetry : Didn't Name It... Just Started Rightin It

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by shaneak, Jan 26, 2002.

  1. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hope this doesn't offend anyone... but curious of anothers thoughts. In view of my own... Its long... and I hope you enjoy.... I haven't scribed like this a while...

    Come on my People.. talk to me...
    Obvious.. We are weak and feeble...
    Oblivious to the Governments' Plan..
    You may think this is all about the White & Black man...
    We must step behind the color...
    We are being used as human beings..
    As we continue to feen off all objects that don't mean a thing...
    This about the RICH VS. POOR
    Either you're in or out.
    Soon the underpaid will shout
    "TAX BREAK"
    How much will the Gov't take!!!
    And all those that got laid off...
    Thinking you straight cause the Gov't paying you off...
    Refund money comes up short...
    Double take on Tax Reports!!!!
    Where was your tax detuctible
    But the Gov't is phuckable...
    See.. it far from a white, black issue...
    We're in a recession based on our Gov't misuse...
    Of our Glorious Funds...
    And our President still has a rating above 81...
    "Percent that is..."
    Stock has not rised...
    The homeless are still outside...
    And yet we give millions to feed another Country...
    Ain't it funny...
    And our strong proud men...
    Not to mention women..
    Out their to the rescue.. We cannot see the Truth...
    A battle based upon an opinion...
    The lost was over a thousand...
    Now out for justice...
    We go and make a Ruckus...
    While She still Bleeds...
    .... ..... ..... .... ....

    And other countries feed...
    Off of Our impurities...
    Tradition.. gone with identity...
    Values... Lost in our own beliefs...
    We pray for peace...
    But don't have the patience for guidance..
    When will we learn...
    The Spirituality... Of our Country...
    It cries.. and whimpers.. from the pain...
    Its being drained.. Not Just the Earth...
    But at the birth of our Children...
    They feed off of you and me...
    Some where we go lost...Crossed...
    Between right and wrong...
    Handshakes and Legal Documents...
    Proclamations and Amendments...

    And for my soul.. this soul is only part of us... But this earth makes us whole... We were taught peace within..
    Whether mixed with African or Indian!!!!:D
    We reach into our spirituality and find peace...
    Thats what makes us whole...
    Thats what makes us...
    Before we existed...
    Our Fathers existed...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    truely felt

    da depth u sho i feel deep within
    knowing & seeing all it's issues
    of lawmakers and da poor man
    as rich get richer on our hard earned
    dollars!.........write dem word sis.......

    do stop by and hit my guessbook below
    and thank u for dis wisdom u pose........
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Neak Neak~

    Sista you rocked this & it's tight!! Definitely felt the multiple meanings articulated in this piece...keep crankin' em' out like this sistah friend!

    And the title is fitting....lovedid it...."Just started RIGHTIN' It"...


    Always :heart:

    N2
     
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    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hear

    your words 100.
    "percent that is"
    i agree with every word, but
    it's almost like a catch 22 sumtimes.
    all the time.

    stay ahead brotha.

    hw
     
  5. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My Mental Just started Going...

    Rich: I know how you feel me.. I'm sure we've all been dhere or done seen it. And most Def... I'll be right on over....

    N2: Girl it ain't nothing but love!!!:D I was just laying there writing... and the next thing i knew.. i actually Just started Rightin... :eek: Just things that been go through this poor girls head these past few months... That I haven't written down..
    The title...It truely is befitting of this piece... Thanks for the insight my sister!!!;)

    Hi-wa: I've come to realize that almost everything is a catch 22... you win some... you lose some... Just make sure your actions are for the right reasons....
    Thanks for the read!!!
     
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    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Shaneak

    write them words
    speak that truth!!
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sha.


    ...where you been?? :)

    well... i hate to sound redundant by copyin' the
    poets befo me... but! they stole what i wanted
    to say!! :lol: so imma just add a... "RIGHT ON!"

    this was a tyght scribe my dear! thanks for sharin'

    :heart:
    SunShyne~
     
  8. cocobutterskyn

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    Shaneak

    Some of the most creative works are created from just writing. I enjoyed the read. :)

    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
  9. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My Ladies!!!

    Sistahs always supporting sistahs.. their is so much love in here!!! :x:

    Afri: Girl all i can do is write these words... I just wanna know how it can be publicly heard!!! Because we truly need to wake up...

    GA: Oh i been around... checking you guys out from time to time.. getting my little crib organized (as some would say HOUSE IN ORDER).
    Now you know you are always unique in your own way.. thats what makes us all special!!!! ;) Out uniqueness!!!! :x: So I'm gonna add in your Right.... and call the title... Just started Righting It!!! LOL :x:

    Coco: Always giving me your wise and kind words.. I am always appreciate of responses!!! I'm glad you enjoyed the read.. Cause i sure can't stop reading it...
     
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    yeah, shaneak, definitely sumthin worth speakin on!
    and it's so on point...
    yet how many of us reach inside ourselves and
    reach out to God to find our peace?
    we can't allow the lost majority to infect
    our own offspring...
    teach.
    -7:spinstar:
     
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