Quiet Poetry Lounge : Did you think?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by queentswana, Sep 27, 2005.

  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Did you think you could just two-step, back into my heart?
    when the need for another love drove us apart?

    Did you think, I'd sit idle and pull out my hair...
    since you made it plain that you no longer care?

    If she was all this, and she was all that
    why in the he!! do ya wanna come back?

    All the nights I needed you, you wasn't there
    if she can beat me rocking...she can have my chair


    She can have all the moments, I once shared with you
    and I wish you both well...I really do

    But remember this before I split the scenes
    that you had the best, of the best...of Queens

    Oh...

    And that letter you wrote, that'll never reach my sight...
    I burned it with trash, late last night

    You made that bed, so suffercate in your ****
    and from me to you...you know what to kiss

    oop's...did I say that??
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well yes, you did say that, and convincingly so....whoa. Call 911, that pen is on fire!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Oh My my do i dare
    but yes i truely care
    that letter was my heart
    but it 's burned and scared
    she never ment a thing
    it was that passion dream
    those moments is like treasure
    something no other can measure
    but o'k part but remember
    ya still my sweet pleasure

    let me say sista Queent you took this one and rocked ya pen is indeed on fire
    i hope you didn't mine coz i couldn't help myself i really enjoyed this red hot piece
    that speaks so clear and to the point i see you don't play whoaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!
     
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    To reiterate....

    It may be a feisty poem...but it speaks of

    "knowing oneself and not settling for less"...


    More women should adopt this attitude...A Queens Attitude

    ^5 my sista!
     
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    Very Nice Queen. As Angelicsage stated " More women should adopt this attitude...A Queens Attitude "

    The whole poem is a strong flow. Every stanza.
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I love this piece. It reminds me of a piece I wrote...but it's too raunchy to post. However, I posted the clean version on here though. :D

    Tight piece, QueenTswana. You're not the one to be played with...you strong Black woman you. :D

    :toast:
     
  7. PurpleMoons

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    Hahahaha! My Queen Is Bad!

    One thing I learned about the Sisters, Is she will never laydown, and still she rise!

    Great peace Sister Queen!
     
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    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another great "angry" poem, QueenT! Next time, u shouldn't hold back and tell us how u are really feeling instead of being so timid with yo words.
     
  9. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol...after the collab, I wasn't ready to release the pen yet...smh
    but do keep "911" on hold, cause I ain't nearly finished yet...lol
    thanks watz for always supporting.
     
  10. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Storm,
    My life is like this: I will lose/remove/drop everything I got (materialistic)...to keep the "Real" ...I owe it to Me!!
    luv you Secret Storm