Black Poetry : Did I???

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Did I deserve to go to bed, alone
    …to wake up at 5:00am to find you still not home

    Did I?

    Did I deserve to raise our child…on my own
    Coz you were too busy doing your own thang
    To play Mommie for long

    Did I deserve the agony
    Of watching you change into someone
    I couldn’t imagine you to be
    Hitting all the spots
    With yo’ panties showing
    So, all the playaz could see
    You were ho’ing

    Did I?

    Did I give so little
    That I forced you into the streets
    Were you so weak
    That you couldn’t ask of me
    What you demanded of them

    Did I deserve the snips
    …the harsh lips
    Or all the pain you put me through
    When all I wanted to do
    Was love you

    Did I?
    {sigh}
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    NO U DIDN'T...................
    TYTE SCRIBE BALLERRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!
     
  3. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayum baller another tyte poem...deep...I feel ya.
     
  4. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No baby you didn't deserve it...
    Lemme see if I can hit this flow right quick cuz I haven't flowed in a while...

    What you deserve is a queen
    A woman whose talents are unique
    One who sweeps you off your feet
    One who shows you how to be
    Proud for being you and having she
    One who shows you that life is truly
    Worth living
    A beautiful thing
    That is given to us kindly...
    You deserve to be treated magnificently.

    What you deserve
    There is no name for
    What you deserve you cannot label.
    Love, yeah it might be able
    To label
    But what is love per say??
    It could be the emotions we convey
    Or the things we see every day.

    You deserve the best
    One who lets you rest on their breast
    Every night as you lay
    One who's not ashamed to say
    That they are your soulmate
    One who is not overcome by naivete'
    But only can make you happy.

    :hammer: I'm not really feelin this...guess my WB (writers block) is settling back in...
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man baller no you didn't deserve tha5t at all
     
  6. NADIA*BINTA

    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    NAW... u didn't deserve any of the above... :(... come my way... let me give u some luv :)...


    peace
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    no you mos def didn't deserve that brutha you deserve a nubian queen ;) very well written flow I like I like
     
  8. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    FAM, THANKS for reading and responding. sometimes, we find ourself in situations we said we'd never be in...and don't know how we got there...or how to get out of it. the only thing we have to say is, I DIDN'T DESERVE THAT.

    PlayWitItPimp05...is that what i deserve? it's interesting, that WRITER'S BLOCK of yours.:) THANKS for the love.
     
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    BaduX Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tyte im feelin it...going through what u did u will soon find your queen:)
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANKS BaduX...glad you were feel'n it.:)

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