Black Poetry : Diagnosis

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  1. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Heart racing, I'm
    aching...so much
    Pain
    Fear of the
    unknown
    Somebody please,
    Help me!
    Trapped in a world
    Of grief and loss
    How could you not
    Be real?
    Hands shaking,
    I can't touch
    Blood boiling,
    I'm about to faint
    Eyes blazing, full
    Of haze
    Crying tears of
    Blood
    Vision gone
    Coughing up words
    Of love
    Yet, feeling so much
    Hate
    Head pounding,
    I can't think
    Ears ringing,
    I can't hear
    Body numb,
    I can't feel
    World shattered
    Nothing left....
    Lifeless
    Meaningless
    Breath taken me
    Loosing you
    Loosing me
    Loosing we
    Slowly
    Drowning
    Vital signs gone
    Accepting the
    Abyss
    Happiness gone
    No more dissecting
    The known
    As I cradle the
    Strength of grief
    Drifting
    Drifting
    Drifting
    Gone

    kas lis, (c)2001...all rights reserved.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!

    sis i feel ya pain
    i live in this haze
    for a long tyme
    my eyes my heart
    was blind but not
    my mind so i reached
    for prayer and it delievered me
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My sista

    the prognosis for "dying love" is always grim....you took me through all the emotional/physical changes (been there b 4) that overtake us when the love, our very breath, is gone.

    Say that!

    Thank you Poet!

    a
     
  4. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i thank you 2 for reading me. after listening to maxwell's symptom unknown, #10 song on his Now cd...i was inspired to roll wit this piece.
     
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    okay now my dear...you have penned this well

    i am left lost for words but wondering what you could write from Maxwell's "Whenever, Wherever, Whatever"

    i see a colab a coming...
     
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    Listerscribin,

    I like this piece...well written
    :eek:
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lister

    after reading this several times, I look back on ma own "Diagnosis". Umm sis like Ms. A said sometimes it can be so grim, but you gotta hold out for we know not what the next day holds.




    One
     
  8. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dnommo, hmmm...now, that's a thought. that is, one of my faves from him. thank you for reading me.

    sexe1, thank you.

    zorb, you are ryght, friend. i thank you, as well, for reading me.
     
  9. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No doubt a very tight piece!!

    I felt the descending motion of loss in this piece. The physical display of this piece on the page..lends itself nicely to the message

    *Dr. Love-Loss*
     
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    Lister....


    ...this piece made me say... "awwww dayum!" :)

    'cause it was oh-so tyght & profound. yeah! dats
    ryght... i said profound! :) soooo... now i see that
    you also do da otha side of the love thang!! & you
    do it soooo well! i'm lovin' this... & the Maxwell cd
    too!!

    AlwaysLove.
    SunShyne~
     
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