Black Poetry : "DEVIN" aka...Motions With My Baby...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dark night
    Should sleep
    not right
    How you seep
    Deep down
    Into depths
    My mind
    My breaths
    Its crazy
    How I feel
    U make me
    Feel unreal
    Cant do
    Nothin right
    Cant undo
    Actions right
    Don’t know
    If you’ll
    Take this poem
    As true
    No other way
    To express
    How you away
    Is a stress
    I feel small
    As I think
    I couldn’t call
    To say don’t leave
    Know my ways
    Are difficult
    Try to change
    But its difficult
    Accustomed
    To one thing
    Cant trust you
    But you I need
    Confusing
    That I know
    Not confusing
    You I love
    Know I am
    Hard at times
    To understand
    I lie at times
    I wanna open
    My heart to you
    I wanna show
    I care for you
    But of course
    I do **** wrong
    On lifes course
    All things go wrong
    Obstacles come
    Scared to trust
    I struggle alone
    Its hard not just
    Tryin to be
    What I need to
    I cant even be
    Right enough for u
    You think
    I’m spoiled
    You think
    I’m confused
    You think
    I’m disloyal
    You think
    too much attention too
    I think
    Your stubborn
    I think
    Your mature
    I think
    Your not used
    To the way
    I wasn’t sure
    Just hurts
    A little bit
    You hurt
    A little bit
    A little call
    Here and there
    I needed it all
    To show u care
    Did it ever occur?
    Maybe I’m scared
    Sometimes I’m sure
    I stopped your care
    When you didn’t call
    For awhile
    I think you called
    another for awhile
    I don’t know
    I cant ask
    Pride just wont
    Let me relax
    Its you I want
    I feel the need
    If you still want
    Stand with me
    I do admit
    I’m not perfect
    And I admit
    You’re not perfect
    And I state
    We’re not perfect
    But from that day
    I first spoke
    That one day
    When you spoke
    And gave emotions
    I couldn’t explain
    How my motions
    Fell into your fate
    I’ve loved you
    For awhile
    You said it too
    Don’t know how
    But I found
    Someone I love
    And I learned
    Love ends abrupt
    So I fear
    One day it’ll end
    And when its clear
    You wont come again
    And as usual
    I’ll be hurt
    Its not unusual
    for me to hurt...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    on da wingz
    what one see is wrong
    is another happy song
    ya heart is pure
    ya soul is renouned
    ya mind is free
    the pain u feel through
    da hurt will defined in
    a moment of time
    keep ya head up sis.
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks that was sweet rich....:)
     
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    I really felt this, you'd have to be made of stone not to. To be teetering on that edge, not knowing for sure, but wanting things to be the same between two. It's an unsettling feeling. Well written scribe sis.
     
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    mmm...sister
    this pricked all the
    heartache I've ever
    experienced in love
    ...this was a flow
    full of sincerity
    reflection and
    optimism...

    Heartfelt to the last drop...
    Sage
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    "it's not unusal for me to hurt"
    this last line rings in me...wanting to say it might not be unusal...but you need to get pass that one...your poetry is rich and your emotions are deep that is so clear in your poetry...so
    let go and let god
    or
    reread your own poem and make some decision..
    i don't want you to be hurt...
    want you to fly free writing
    your emotional poetry...
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much watzinaname and angelicsage for your responses, i'm glad ya'll enjoyed it...
    deepy...i've just been goin through some things with someone thats very special to me and gettin hurt gets old after awhile and the only way i can get through it is too write...i've reread this over and over again...and each time it enlightens me on how i should feel...and things that i need to change in my life...thanks for the heartfelt response...:)
     
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    love can be the greatest thing and the most painful thing we go thru ,,this poem poet ..remined me of that ,,,,thanks for sharing with us ..sista great drop ,,your growing so as a poet i see u ..lol...hookup :jawdrop:
     
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    Love have its good part and bad this was very heartfelt and i been there hold ya head up sis...likes the flow
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everybody for your comments...love is painful...but in a way it helps you grow...
     
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