Black Poetry : Desperately Love You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by afroprincess, Oct 30, 2006.

  1. afroprincess

    afroprincess Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 19, 2006
    Messages:
    31
    Likes Received:
    2
    Ratings:
    +2
    Desperately Love You
    By: afroprincess

    If you stay then Ill stay
    But if you go then I’ll follow
    My dreams are in you
    In everything that say and do
    Forever I ask that you take me as your one and only
    For I believe that you are everything I ever wanted
    So from me to you I say that I desperately love you

    All my life it seems that I have spent my time trying to find you
    And now that I have I spend my time trying to make you happy
    For your happiness is tied in so closely with mine
    If ever you want for me all you have to do is say
    Baby I miss you come back to me
    And then Ill be there in a hurry
    Because it’s true that I desperately love you

    If you stay then I’ll stay
    But if you go then I’ll follow
    My dream is you
    In everything that you say and do
    Forever you asked if I’d be your one and only
    For you believe that I am everything you ever wanted
    So from you to me you say that you desperately love me

    In time I plan to make my life long with you
    Have some kids and a dog if that’s what you want to do
    We maybe young but then again our love is stronger than any storm time could give
    We been through the rain, we stood tall against the storms
    Now it’s time for us to be together forever God willingly

    If you stay and I stay then we stay together
    But if you go and I go then love will follow
    Our dreams are in each other
    In everything we say and do
    Forever we want to be each other’s one and only
    For we believe that we make everything we ever wanted
    So it’s true that we desperately love each other

    Baby I love more than anything
    I love you more than life
    I love more than space if it’s possible
    Oh Baby I love you past my body
    I love you past my mind
    I love you past my heart
    Baby I love you with my soul
    So yes it’s true that I desperately love you

    That’s why I give my hand
    And agree to be the woman that makes your life complete
    I give you happiness and just ask the same for me
    Even though you already made it possible
    I give you everything I am
    For nothing in return I tell you yes I am
    Yes it’s true that I desperately love you

    So if you stay then I’ll stay
    But if you go then I’ll follow
    My dreams are in you
    In everything that say and do
    Forever I ask that you take me as your one and only
    For I believe that you are everything I ever wanted
    So from me to you I say that I desperately love you


    ***This poem is really important to me...so I would appreciate you guys being truthful and telling me what you really think.***
     
  2. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 30, 2005
    Messages:
    428
    Likes Received:
    7
    Occupation:
    Painter
    Location:
    In Tha Bottom! Deeeep South
    Ratings:
    +7
    Truthfully, you put alot a heart into your ink. I think love consumes us and sometimes I would even go as far to say that love does become desperate and we will follow the one we love to the ends of the earth. This poem has a nice sound and poignant emotions flowing everywhere. I have no doubt that your in love after reading it. So just make it happen if it hasn't already occured. Tell this brother so he can be just as desperate about you as you are about him. In desperation we find hope and hope can be love it you want it to be.
     
  3. afroprincess

    afroprincess Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 19, 2006
    Messages:
    31
    Likes Received:
    2
    Ratings:
    +2
    The truth about this poem...

    Actually I just wrote this because I'm getting married in a month and I'm thinking of using this as a surprise for him during the ceremony. I just want to know what some people think of it before I call my self surprising my man with a sorry poem. But thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    this was divine surely he will love it , ya heart spoke deep and fruitful
    to honor him as the one to love and share your beings with ...great write
     
  5. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Aug 1, 2003
    Messages:
    1,332
    Likes Received:
    7
    Occupation:
    Student by day, Poet by night
    Location:
    DETROIT
    Ratings:
    +7
    A sorry poem??

    Girl this is hot!!!
    Yr future husband might steal u away b4
    the ceremony ends if he hears this. This is
    so,so,so sweet. I love it!!!!
    :hearts4: :hearts3: :hearts2:
     
Loading...