Black Poetry : Depression

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thatgirl74, Apr 22, 2004.

  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Enter into
    a realm so
    secluded.
    No one
    can touch
    me here. I
    am safe.
    From accusation
    ridicule
    and criticism.
    SO I lock out
    the light.
    Close my eyes
    and avoid all
    contact that would
    make me feel.
    I am not happy
    here but there is
    security in
    my seclusion.
    I'll be here until
    something in me
    clicks and the
    lights come back on.
    And when I see the
    sunshine I will
    welcome it with
    open arms.
     
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    one_love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow

    Liked how your lines kept me wanting to read more, the world is such a dark place now, but you'll be okay with out the light, if you don't give up the fight.
    One_Love
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this close til the light shine
    can u feel my rayz of sunshine
    breaking through
    this was awesomely tyte flowin
    from deep within ya soul
    love it !! :spinn:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very well put, I love this scribe
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    heal my sista...
    I think we have all been there at one point and time I know I have :look:
    :grouphug:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words so clearly took us to the low, lonely place, well written, emotive piece.
     
  7. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Family.
    I actually wrote this one because one of my closest friends deal with depression and I really had her on my mind so I just pur my self in her shoes.
     
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    unfoolish1223 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt this and everyone can relate at one point and sometimes we dont want to have feelings but you got to keep your head up and keep going
     
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    Your friend is in the right place to collect her thoughts...inside herself. Any and all answers lie...within
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are definitely talented and perceptive.
    I say that because you knew what needed to be said
    How it should have been said
    As if you knew depression personally.
    It's a gifted person who can put themselves
    In another's shoe and communicate the feelings they have.
    I'm in awe of this one
    For personal reasons :look:

    Very good.
    I love your poetry!!!!!!!


    PEACE AND LOVE
    TWISION
     
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