Poetry Critiques : DEPRESSED EMOTIONS PT. 1

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sheikdadon, Aug 8, 2006.

  1. sheikdadon

    sheikdadon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SO MANY DEEP THOUGHTS PLAUGE MY MIND
    TEARS CLOUD MY VISION BLOCKIN ALREADY VAGUE SIGNS
    CAUGHT IN DA RAPTURES OF A MENTAL SLAVE HOUSE
    SMART ENUFF 2 SLIDE THRU DA CRAKS LIK A MOUS
    BUT DA ANGER STEERS ME N2 VISCIOUS TRAPS
    DA STENCH IS LIKE **** FILLED SEWAGE VATS
    EMOTIONS SPEEDIN LIKE ILLICIT AMPHETAMINES
    CANT CONTROL DA ENVIRONMENTAL **** AROUND ME
    TIRED OF FEELIN DA PAIN BUT AINT FIGHTIN DA FEELIN
    WANTIN SO DESPERATELY 2 QUIT FIGHTIN N DEALIN
    SOMETIMES I JUST SIT N THINK
    ITS HARD TO EXPESS IT THOU
    SO I PUT IT ALL IN INK
    I LIKE WHEN IT RAINS
    CUZ IT WASHES MY TEARS
    KINDA LOVE FEELING PAIN
    CUZ IT INCAPACITATES MY INNER MOST FEARS
    I THINK IM LIVING IN VAIN
    CUZ IVE BEEN HURT SO MUCH IN MY 20 YRS
    SMOKIN WEED I CANT SUSTAIN
    CUZ IT EFFECTIVELY CALMS N IT CLEARS
    BUT IT ALSO HINDERS MY MILITARY CARREER


    2 B CONT'D FEEDBACK PLEEEESSSEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!SHEIKDADON
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte scribing make one feel the depth of da pen
     
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