Black Poetry : Dem' Corners

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Wisdom7, Aug 25, 2005.

  1. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thick dark brown
    Sugar coated merry go round
    Fast talk
    Pimpin walk
    Mechanical motions
    Calming oceans
    Here he lay
    There he lies
    Professions of love
    Deceitful eyes
    Quick conversations
    Demanding elations
    Climatic peak
    Again on the sneak
    Tip inexpensive
    Never comprehensive
    Unsatisfied beat
    Heart in the street
    And now u wanna come back!
    For more... what for
    Slow wine...no time
    Forgotten the past
    I too move fast
    Perfect mate
    4 U too late
    Shoulda known ain't no love on dem' corners
    :getout:
     
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    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What can i say besides that **** was -HOTNESS-. It flowed and had a rythm- an engaging rythm. I read it aloud twice. :jawdrop: This was very good. I give it a 9.5 but i know you can give me a 10. Keep writin.
     
  3. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Iwannabe! I actually have one thats been flowin in my head after last night, (tryin to channel some negative energy into a positive by creating a poem) :angel1: Still working on it, but I'll get it out.
     
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    No, dem corners don't love nobody. Tight drop.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up this hit on all beams tyte drop ya pen on fire
     
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    re:Corners

    Hot Poem. I like this a lot. :terrific:
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Watsinaname, $Rich$ and Poetrymama I appreciate the read!
     
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