Black Poetry : Delivered

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Poetic Pride, Aug 6, 2004.

  1. Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It took a long time for me to see your face again
    And not want to run, not want to hide
    Because God has reassured peace inside my heart
    and in my mind...
    That place I allowed you to once manipulate and possess
    because I trusted you, I looked up to you, I saw success
    in you...You were my hero, you were my inspiration to write
    A lover's song when I despised love poetry, you were my joy when
    my cloudy skies kept my head low, not wanting to look towards the
    heavens cause I was ashamed.
    I was afraid that the instant I raised my head lightning would've
    Struck me into righteousness...
    As awkward as it sounds I wanted to do wrong, and everday
    YOU saw to it that I stayed in a position to need you,
    YOU saw to it that I followed you..
    YOU saw to it that I didn't tell...I was sworn to secrecy,
    BUT I TOLD...
    ...I told my girlfriends at school that I was in love with a man.
    I bragged that a boy couldn't soothe a young girl's heart...
    What can two inexperienced adolescents do: Experiment?
    Yet, my man and I scatted words a boy ain't never heard of,
    can't put into action or express.
    It was like heaven on earth in my man's presence...like like...
    Pain meeting pleasure or was it pleasure meeting pain..
    Just a lil bit of ecstacy that on several occassions gave
    me bits and pieces of what is now a stream of consciousness--
    Dominant, Controlling, Agressive, Giving, Barter and Trade, Pleasure,
    Pain, Enduring, Neverending, Ecstacy, Cry-for-Mercy..
    It was like Fire and Desire (Tina Marie and Rick James)
    But when reality hit and all was said and done, having completed
    his Operachun,
    I was stuck in a trance in between calling on Jesus and giving in
    to that wicked trend...
    ...Conflicting with an inner force, I cried for nights praying for
    Deliverance.

    ---
    Delivered.
     
  2. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    I could feel every ounce
    of your pain and desire!!!!

    You brung this one home!

    Heartfelt scribing!!!!!!!
    Loved your flow!!!!!!!!
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight scribe
    i was in this
    nicely posed and expressed
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank goodness that we can be delivered from what seems like the pit of hell. Felt the ache in this, but I also saw the deliverance at the end. Well written piece.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt deep painful roll i felt it all as u speak
    express on
     
  6. Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deliverance

    Amen..thank God for deliverance!
     
  7. FINDLOVEINME

    FINDLOVEINME Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very emotional and expressive
     
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