Black Poetry : Deep Enough?

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  1. I-khan

    I-khan Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Erousing your brain,
    removing the pain,
    you'll never be the same
    when I get deep enough.

    Exciting your mind
    your sheets we bind
    dotted line I will sign
    when I get deep enough.

    Tickle your spine
    you moan and whine
    sweat drops in a line
    when I get deep enough.

    Like a Lioness I tame
    the temptation we blame
    on the on-going love game
    on my chest you'll proclaim
    "I don't love the same
    since I was hit by your aim"
    when I get deep enough.

    Your face with a smile
    Will make me feel worth while
    Like running a mile
    for a sick child's cure
    when I get deep enough.

    Loving your soul
    warming the cold
    cooling the heat
    making you feel whole
    when I get deep enough.


    From the inside out
    with no doubt
    we will have bouts
    but victory we'll never tout
    When I get deep enough.

    Intertwined are our souls
    open like bowls
    When I get deep enough.


    I was a fool
    treating you like a pool
    hoping to touch the bottom.


    Forever we'll grow
    the end we'll never know
    I do not know
    how deep we will grow


    Deep enough? Deep enough?
    I kept on asking
    Like i was tasking

    we fly like doves
    while expressing love

    now i am deep enough
     
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    U took it there and some ........as the saying goes
    how deep can u go , is it deep enough !!

    tyte joint poet !
     
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    I-khan Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I just need to give my mind some:weights:
     
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    One never knows when we meet that person that makes us get soul deep. I'm enjoying your poetry l-khan.
     
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    Dam deep enough for real
    Its a wonderful feeling huh
    Loved the piece poet
    Much Love Poet
     
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    yes i love it, love it this deep enough can you get deeper than this
    this some hot stuff flow on poet.:kiss1:
     
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    I-khan that was beautiful!:kiss1:
     
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    I-khan Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you blessed heart.


    I gave this expression to a female freind of mine and she tweaked it to fit her perspective, tell me what you think or her remix.

    This is her remix of my work:

    The fragmented spine,
    Now dispersing itself as we grind,
    Perspiration takes the lead in a single line;
    When I get deep enough.

    Like a lioness you tame.
    The temptation we blame,
    On the on-going love "game,"
    On your chest I'll proclaim,
    "I don't love the same,
    Since I was hit by your aim"
    When you get deep enough.

    Your face with a smile,
    Will make me feel worth while,
    Like running a mile,
    For a sick child's cure;
    When you get deep enough.

    Oh, how I love your soul,
    In a time of despair it warms my cold,
    And you replace it with that old,
    Heat sensation,
    Sort of like the fireplace in an old basement;
    When we get deep enough.

    You caress my hair,
    And remind me that although you're not present in the physical,
    You're there,
    In my heart.
    Though set apart,
    By mountains (to which they reach their highest peak),
    Our love now overflows like that of a fountain.
    Especially, when we get deep enough.

    Intertwined, are our souls,
    Open like an empty bowl,
    In order to be filled with a sense of completion,
    Rather than a sense of deletion,
    So that my time with you is in existence,
    Inseperable, for our love is constantly persistant;
    When you get deep enough.

    I was a fool,
    Treating you as if you were somewhat of a pool,
    Hoping to submerge to the base.
    Only to find that the reflection of your face,
    Appears everytime I try to sink in,
    And yet, deep within,
    Something's telling me to hold steadfastly to this feeling.
    When I get deep enough.

    Why ask when this will end?
    As time transcends,
    It will one day come to a hault,
    When you and I will be at fault,
    Either because we put this love to a pause;
    Or merely because,
    I wasn't deep enough.

    "Deep enough? Deep enough?"
    You would ask,
    Hoping that at some point,
    You would complete this task.

    We reach a superior extremity,
    To which silence then takes over me.
    I arise like a dove,
    As we express our love...
    "Yes. That was deep enough."
     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow that was wonderful:luvv:
    The two pieces together sounds like a song:kiss1:
     
  10. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh and thanks for changing my name:kiss1:
    That was sweet
     
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