Black Poetry : 'Declaration of Independence' : In the year of 2004

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  1. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don't ever say I am the cause of true heartache and pain,
    because as you can see, nothing has been gain....
    On me, trying to put all the blame,
    and this tyme, it was me..... as you claim......
    I am so dayum tired of ur accusations,
    well, right now... here's my declaration:
    I declare that I leave from this biased relationship,
    maybe in time, I will want a friendship....
    I was told it was all about personality,
    in this, couldn't express individuality....
    I was told love from grand and great,
    now my mind isn't so straight...
    I was blinded by your touch and ways,
    and right now, I was wish my soul was astray...
    At nite, it was I who listen to ur battles within,
    had me at nite wishin this was back to the beginnin...
    Got me thinkin you out in the streets,
    but this tyme, naw playa, you don't got me beat.....
    Kept tellin me how you got me so drawn in,
    but whose love was real, in the end?
    Oh how you cheated so many times,
    but claimin... your heart was always mind...
    Funny how love changes a situation,
    and people sayin.... 'Girl, that's just infatuation'...
    But I know my body and soul,
    and this tyme in this game, I got to fold....
    Since ur mind is never tame,
    just never forget my name..
    And I just gave u my declaration,
    and know our love will never be put on preservation...
    So to let you know, I left to save u from heartache and pain,
    and as you can see, I still have nothin to lose or anything else to gain...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was very good flowing ya on point
    flow on
     
  3. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, thank you.... just had to say what was on my mind....
     
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    indeed i felt it too the verses drip together from da mental
     
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    It does sound like you are speaking from the heart...flow on....
     
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    this was a good strong drop
    flow on....
     
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    you herrr that? Thats me applauding.

    Extremely poignant piece

    The Dreamer
     
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    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :thanks: guys so much for da love and much support..... Lately, I haven't been able to write like I use too til last nite..... Now mentally, I am back.... So, now I can flo right on.... Thanks again.... :D
     
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    This was a mature point of view!

    This was a very mature point of view for one so young.
    But out of pain great art is often created, remember that!
    I like the way you always take the high road...and that says
    a lot about your character and the way you were raised.
    Big ups to you and the work you do...
    Blessings On Your House! :toast:
     
  10. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you..... msluciousb..... :love: