Poetry Critiques : Decipher my Dreams III

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  1. Prizefighter16

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    Decipher My Dream III


    Had a dream Martin Luther King and I took a long walk
    Told him my goals he understood them and we talked and we talk
    About things as trivial as the light of sun’s position
    As it gracefully acted in the soulful rendition
    Of color intermission
    For skin color’s commission
    I love the view of beautiful dark chocolate faces in my vision

    And the clouds
    In my dreams
    It looks so different when I look at it now
    That’s cause I can see my reflection when I look at it now
    Don’t know how
    But when I looked at it, I ain’t see no flaw
    As if God was right next to me,
    Embracing me, lovingly
    Telling me not to worry
    Stay in heaven, there’s no hurry
    Cause everything was alright
    I stay there to bathe in this new freedom light
    But as I’m ready to take the freedom flight
    My mind races through me and awakens me with spite
    Telling me there’s not time for dreams,
    I still have to fight
    For true freedom

    And there is the end
    The end of all my dreams
    No more time for dreams
    Gotta come back to reality
    As if someone just pulled on my gravity
    Sayin no sorry
    No fantasy for you.
    Keep dreamin like that
    And your dream won’t come true
    Actions are the only thing left to do

    I know it’s not possible to make all of this true
    But what does my dream mean for you?
    Do you just see a bunch of words?
    Or can you understand the spiritual verbs

    Do you think you could decipher this dream for me?
    By helping this world to be a little more free?
    You might think I’m crazy
    You may just want to sedate me
    But I can’t ignore this pain that is bleeding through me
    So my subconscious created this full dream remedy
    Until I am well
    Until I’ll be ready
    To begin to play the tune of the freedom melody
    Blast it throughout the entire country
    I’ll say
    No the spangled banner ain’t playing today
    Who wants to listen to a bunch of lies anyway?
    I think I’ll call it the peace RE-Birthday
    I’m thinkin’ I’ll schedule it up in May
    As in May you hear my peace address
    May you listen to my soul expressed?
    Read the dream written by the reality press
    See the dream of all come to reality, yet.
    But there’s still a fraction of this dream that I don’t get

    Do you know what this all means?
    Can you help me to decipher my dreams?​



    peace family...thanks for readin it,lol, if you do
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    again nice concept and it was structured with depth
    a very good write
     
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    The ancestors blood the flows through my veins liked this post poet wheww.
     
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    I dig the peace RE-birthday mix!
     
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