Poetry Critiques : Decipher my dreams II

Prizefighter16

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sorry guys, ain't been around much. here's something i wanted to post like last century.

Decipher my dreams II

When I’m livin in my dream
You can catch me at a window
Because I want to fly
Right next to the sky
And go higher than birds go high
No one can catch me
No one can see me
I soar for the people who were made to die
I stay forever asking why, why, why?

When I dream I dream of lighting like a flame in the darkness
There is no wind to expire me
Cause lo and behold I am finally free
You would be free
My soul would be free
Finally I can run outside and be me
Refreshingly
Spiritually
Consuming everything I can see

When I dream, I dream of mind scribing
I am taken still with pages
Pages and pages of black leaders courageous
And there are stages upon stages
Of apologies
From all the people who wronged us
Our ancestry
I say finally
Some reciprocity
Can I have the mule and forty acres please?
Too bad too soon I woke up from this dream

But I also dream of taking thoughts like I sip hot cocoa
As my friend says it, no more livin La Vida loco
Gave away the prize Gucci, donated those Manolo’s
Figured hey I’ll give away my things
Just to wear them freedom rings...​

That's the second part.
 
This fantastic vision of yours is one of beauty, ever growing, becoming a PRIZE in and of itself. As you continue to take ownership of your birthright, that of an artist, you will take us places where dreams evolve into what's real. Love your work.
 
1poetsought said:
This fantastic vision of yours is one of beauty, ever growing, becoming a PRIZE in and of itself. As you continue to take ownership of your birthright, that of an artist, you will take us places where dreams evolve into what's real. Love your work.


thanks 1poet. Yes as you can see i am a dreamer. But my head ain't too far up in the clouds. I'm an active kinda girl. So maybe the depth of what i'm sayin can be a reality.

thanks for reading my poem
 
this was refreshing, i must say....
a black woman give'n up da gucci....whoa...thas a serious dream u got there...lol
but seriously...this poem capture the visions that a lot of concious black people
have nowdays....minus the brainwashing...i like the second part a lil mo then the first...
but they both were on point...keep scribe'n poet...

one love
khasm
 

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