Black Poetry : Death took him so young

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  1. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The phone rang got a call today
    Heard the voice so clear yet it seemed far away
    I didn't know what was the matter
    Your voice cracked like a thunder clatter
    "What's wrong dear friend are you alright"
    "I can't take this anymore so I'm destroying my life"
    Tried to figure out why you did it what caused you such pain
    I just wished it would rain,rain,and rain
    Heard the noises as you broke cds and turned over tables
    Loud screeching noises like cow stables
    Uncle yelled"D you alright"
    Got quiet settled your difference after the fight
    Long low moans sounding like a horror flick
    threw the rope over tied it and felt a click
    Died in the garage no one knew til the next morning
    "D get up come on mama D won't get up for school"
    Opened the door saw your body flenching over the stool
    Rushed to the hospital in a bad state
    Still alive only by fate
    Stole ya life away just like that
    Remember you have 1 life not 9 of a cat
    Man it's so hard cuz now you're gone and everybody misses you
    Remebered how you cut up in class and we'd laugh at the things you do
    Layin in that casket didn't seem real to no one
    Stil looked good with your jewelry and red jacket on
    17 years old could've been grown
    Saw your birthday in the paper last week that's why I wrote this poem.
    ~Dedicated to my boy D. Stone love you baby R.I.P.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Heartfelt piece. Can't understand why things happen as they do, just know that God still watches over.
     
  3. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I know just can't believe it would happen to someone so close in my age group
     
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    poeticly_yours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow that is so sad. I am so sorry for your loss. God bless you and the family
     
  5. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you :hot: :hot: :coffee: I'm still smilin lol
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I just had a friend of mine go through something
    like that and it's hard. But I feel that u just gotta stay strong.
    This was very touching ang beautiful
    Loved this in every way.
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you and yes it's hard :wink:
     
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    REPLY TO SENSUALREALITY

    Poets sometimes must present tragedy
    Hope your writing has been helpful remedy


     
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    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    REPLY TO SENSUALREALITY

    Poets sometimes must present tragedy
    Hope your writing has been hopeful remedy


     
  10. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes it is once I finished writing this poem I felt like a stone was lifted off of my body but it's all good everybody's still smiling :wink:
     
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