Quiet Poetry Lounge : Dear Lite. (light)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by plainrhythm, Aug 25, 2005.

  1. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dear Lite,there a
    truth behind you?
    Am I gonna see my
    whole soul beside you?

    you're so pretty and
    bright,
    darkness shies from you and
    many can't see without you.
    those who can't see anyway
    hope and dream about you.

    dear lite i don't remember where
    you are, but i know you weren't
    there when i needed you the most.
    it's ok,
    you were probably on holiday.
    yeah.
    that's right.
    holiday.

    maybe you can come and we'll play
    cars or sumpin.. not barbie
    she makes me feel ugly.

    and we can't play hide 'n' seek
    because i won't find you.
    you'll play with me right? we can even
    visit my dragon friends! mommy
    says i'm stupid. but you don't believe that

    do you?

    daddy says i'm world class idiot..
    thats sumpin nice ain't it?
    he loves me. yep he do.

    can you keep a secret lite?
    these people say i'm....

    crazy. they don't
    know our little secret and we'll keep
    it.
    i won't admit to craziness, lite,
    tell them!
    i won't wake up! I WON'T WAKE UP!
    WAKE up... wake... up...

    "wake up,kid, it's time for your
    medication"

    lite..?? are you still there? they're calling
    me now.

    lite?

    hello?

    *sigh*
     
  2. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked this. It was different and interesting. I loved that it was so conversational too and that you were speaking to light- and that light wasnt literally like...sunlight only. I liked it.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Explaining how the light that one person sees may be invisible to everyone else. Did I understand you correctly poet? I agree with iwannabe, this was interesting.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this leave a tingle and mos def different yet mad tyte
     
  5. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wannabe, watz and RICH: thanks guys for the love!

    watz: i usualy prefer the reader to have their own personal perception of what i wite... i feel it ruins imagination if you tell the reader what to think! :lift:

    thanks fam, i love you all, from the bottom of my heart!!! destee.com is my lite!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome from within as well .....onelove
     
  7. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo i really enjoyed this poem...it was out there...and very unique....loved the fact that everything was summed up by the end of the poem...

    the beginning had its own story....and kind of made a twist towards the middle....or at least that's wat i got from it.

    :cool:
    peace out
    keep the flow goin....

    word from mz.soull
    aka prizefighter :cool:
     
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