Black Poetry : Dealin

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  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just tryin’ to deal
    With what’s come my way,
    when hands talk too much
    and words never say;
    when did rides in the car
    and talks in the park
    became looks of disdain
    begging for dark?

    when did it happen
    that you just lived the movements?
    when kisses meant nothing
    and lies lay beneath sentiments?
    how long did you sit?
    how long did we lay?
    the entire time -
    did you ever want to stay?

    While you’re shouting these words
    And wishing me dead
    While our children listen
    This is what I heard said,
    “You’re a no good ***** . . .
    I can’t stand your ways,
    You never do nothing,
    yet always up to something.”

    I freeze - I can’t move
    I’m not being indignant,
    but I’m the same **** woman
    who delivered your two children.
    The same woman who loved you
    through and through;
    who would jump through fire
    if it would save you.
    The same woman who cried
    when you left and cry when you hurt,
    who has been trying to fix
    what’s shattered not broken -
    who always held faith
    and continued hoping
    who did all my homework
    not for a pat on the back
    but for a husband who
    didn’t think that he lacked
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow.....this a page from my book in a woman version
    i know this so well had the same twist under the spell
    i cast true faith and place'd it all in the hands of the creator
    and smile and never wondered why and guess what
    HE DELIVERED me HAPPINESS .

    I tell you sometime one's mate can be a change in fate and life
    when the blood boils at 360 degrees on a plate of trouble & problems
    better known as hate.
     
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    What you described for me was that instant when you first wonder, at what moment did he stop loving? It just doesn't seem possible at first, and I know it hurts. But you will get beyond this, it will take time, but just believe and you shall.
     
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    I enjoyed reading this flow... Thanks

    So many times.
    In relationships things like blame, anger, and frustration are focused where it should not be placed.

    The issue is external in many cases.

    Its lack of income, lack of travel, time together.
    Suspicions of cheating by one or the other.

    Words can hurt.

    Especially when they come from someone you care about. Still love.

    Visualize with them a wall of bricks.
    Sit down, if they will.
    Hold hands while you discuss and think of how together
    the wall can be lowered.

    When you can see over a part of it.
    Like getting your nose above water.

    Clearer thinking comes into play.

    No one is wrong.. never 100% right.
    After all is tried and done. Let it be.

    I really enjoyed reading this flow. Powerful piece. Truly it is moving.​
     
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    i rememeber bending over backwards
    trying to push our relationship forward
    Turning myself inside out and in again
    So they he would be the one to win
    But I must confess I don't miss those days
    Glad that I can smile over the parted ways
    Wow. sis this took me back down meomory lane
    What a well crafted piece for such a time of rain
     
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