Black Poetry : Dead reckoning...

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  1. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Some time in my life I must have slipped and fell
    head met the concrete read my name in braille
    blood seeped as I embraced the street
    it was the lowest depths that I could ever reach
    Experienced the darkest of dreams as I was forced to sleep
    venturing through the bowels of subconciousness
    along that thin line of nothingness
    that crosses over into insanity
    a sick representation unworthy of amnesty
    sounds of calamity echoed the habitat
    glimpse of faces distorted by burning ash
    borderlining at the bottomless breach of life
    I heard a cadence calling me to give up and die
    categorized as something caustic but no chariot came
    engulfed in suffering
    from flames of past actions that call my name
    all contained here and coexistent to collisions I revisit
    scrambled in sights and sounds that's only found
    six feet beneath the ground
    To self I said
    is this a conversation with the dead
    and answered I to myself with no countenance I fled
    from possibilities of such an envoy
    delivering deathblows of ultimate woes
    turning cold I froze the thought
    of foreseeing me standing at my own plot
    the stench of inexplicable rot rearranged
    my derranged
    horribled horrors that harbored this spiritual plane
    redirecting my time laspse
    as I moralized the question
    Is death the nullification
    To life unlearned lessons
    ruling out all known factors as I seethe in sorrow
    cursed forever knowing there won't be tomorrow...

    :confused:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    look to whench ya help come from .... forth da darkness will
    be of light and da confused mind will become clear .....
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deep Bra-Man, deep!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    go head!!! poet! this is truly a deep piece
     
  5. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah! Yeah!

    I definitley feel ya on dis piece Bruh!!
    Tyte Scribe!!
    Keep probing at the righteous for the storms shall come only to strengthen our condition in order to deal with the real...I'm feelin dis!!:toast:
     
  6. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    frightening...allegorical... so many things at once...keep walking through your mind to get to the real truth, brother.
    dee
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yo i completely lovedided this piece

    especially the last five to six lines

    the finish was sik
     
  8. patrice

    patrice Active Member MEMBER

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    once again friend, you ripped it!!! i'm feelin' this piece for real. tight tight dawg!!!!
     
  9. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tell darren if he don't post soon, I'm sending some mo's to his crib..and uh, thanks for the cumps
     
  10. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh sorry, I meant folks to his crib, dirty ones at that....ha ha ha
     
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