Black Poetry : dayum

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  1. MORE

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    i sit and think
    now that we've got space to breathe
    of all the bad things
    you've done to me

    then a flash like
    out the corner of my mind
    gets nostalgic
    over the good times

    so i force my soul
    to feel the pain
    to remind my heart
    not to love you again

    most times it don't work
    so i replay the tapes
    of the emotional rape
    but the picture seems to fade

    okay so why do i
    hear your voice crystal clear
    like your right next to me
    i mean right here!

    i forgave you and
    you didn't even ask
    im rapidly forgetting
    the chaos in our past

    and remembering your touch
    and you breathing on me
    how your footsteps sound
    its just too crazy

    dayum.



    :oops: :look:
     
  2. Aaliyahmonet

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    This was really good. I like tha flow of this piece. Keep up the good work:)

    AM
     
  3. Randee

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    You right, Day-um
    why you let him to this to you
    after all the $*** that you've been through
    you know he'll always be the same
    that he will always cause you pain
    APOLOGIZE? He would have to be wrong
    and how could he be if you continuously live your whole lifelong
    enabling him to treat you this way.
    I know you hurt and so I pray
    that you understand how much your life is worth
    pray that this is the hour of your rebirth
    Hasn't been that long for me
    and I know exactly what it is you see
    when you rewind the times in your mind
    and you are searching to find
    the reason that you stayed
    stop looking at it with such dismay
    AND DO NOT forget the past
    history always bites you in the a**
    try however for you to forgive
    It's the only shot you have to live.
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

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    lovin' this...
     
  5. true love

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    i think we all know how is this feels. i loved this piece.
     
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    I felt these conflicting emotions many times...it is crazy...
     
  7. luvNwords

    luvNwords Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm feeling this one!!
     
  8. the_story

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    u know i love this one gurl, ur poetry is slammin keep it going
     
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    this is 2 real 2 me truthfully speaking dayum...
     
  10. renee31127

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    I really like this one.
     
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