Khasm13 : daylight...

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  1. Khasm13

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    my body
    saturated in darkness
    overwelmed by the pitch black night
    shivers
    as my mind wonders
    fixated by imaginary fiends
    or are they really there?
    as i use my swinging arms as antane feelers
    can anyone see me?
    walking around lost in nothingness
    can anyone save me?
    my pupils dialate
    but too no avail
    where has all the light gone?
    why has it forsaken me?
    in my time of need
    in my time of great need
    sunshine i swear that i would cry
    if i could feel your supreme warmth across my cold face
    warming my froze bitten breath
    enriching my soul
    but no
    darkness covers me like a sleeping bag
    tucked into this walking sleep
    from which it is unknown to me
    if i shall ever wake
    and see daylight....
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Felt the chill in this, sometimes it seems like the rescue of daylight will never come. What a dreadful feeling, and you captured it well.
     
  3. angelicsage

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    wow...you pull your reader
    in soooo deeply...
    this was so real...
    you could not only
    imagine but feel the
    darkness...

    feeling this...
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

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    you pulled me
    i could feel this all the
    way through
    with the chills and all
    tight drop....
    i am feelin this from top
    to bottom....
    flow my brother.....
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    man tyte took me under this was awesome
     
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    I second that!

    I love reading and hearing your work Khasm.
    You have that gift of making things so clear and so real,I feel as if I'm there almost.
    You have done it again, another great piece.
    Tyte FloE Khasm...tyte indeed
    LoveNpeace :heart:
    Nita
     
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    the hope of seeing the light
    to come from the darkness
    to suvive
    feeling you deeply on this
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    BeAuTiFuLsOBeAuTiFuL

    nice brother
    very nice
    what can i say
    shalom yahsistah
     
  9. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OOOHHHH MY GOSH!!!!
    this was a really nice piece!
    Hope you get out of that saturated darkness
    and find your guiding light!!
    very nice....

    greets
    moham
     
  10. gempis

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    This is so very captivating, and again, here's another side of ya that I didn't know about, brotha. You are very talented, and this piece is dope.
     
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