Black Poetry : Day-jah-vou

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  1. icandi

    icandi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this man who stands before me
    should have been named day-jah-vou
    i know ive never seen him
    maybe we met in an outer relm
    he might have been standing idly
    but on side of me :angel1:
    in my dreams last night
    wispering words so sweet like
    he said he will be my knight in shining armor
    and i his queen of the nile
    its like im the seconds in his minute
    and he's the minute that starts my hour
    ****...that ****** words are like raindrops
    poetic rain showers
    we are so much a like
    it starts to make me think
    is it real what i see
    or a figmint of my imajination
    ive been searchin for so long
    i guess i looked in all the wrong places
    so when i got on my diet and stopped looking so hard
    God gave me the man
    who just captured my charm
    esquiste is he
    making me stretch beyond my reach
    dam i dont even know him look what hes done to me
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my sister..wow
    this flow is tighttttttt
    I am feeling this
    dangggg :)
    nice one
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed u have a flow sweet and tyte
    flow on sis
     
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    Girl you write with passion and side order of "true" emotion...
    feeling the vibe in this piece...
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    girl this was tight...
    i like it alot..emotions thru this...
    flow on
     
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    Hi your poem was very, very good.
     
  7. icandi

    icandi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love
     
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    It seems like the best gifts in life have always been right under our eyes the whole time we just neededto take time to smell the roses. Tite flow....